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by mirandler43

person Nomme de Plume
schedule November 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
omg! that was so great! i don't think i've ever read neji/shika before, but nonetheless, that has to be the best neji relationship i've come across! it was so sweet! and i loved the sasu/naru bathroom scene. you two rule. i hope you can update soon!
person redtatsu
schedule November 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Maybe he could stab it with a crayon... I about died when I read this. The whole scene with the bug had me in tears. Love your humor. Shikamaru and Neji finally together about broke my heart. I hope there will be a happy ending for those two. LOOOOOVED this chapter. It was definitely worth the wait.
schedule November 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
yay!! both pairs got some lovin in!! hehe that was hot.
person a
schedule November 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i don't think you can possibly appreciate HOW UTTERLY EXCITED I WAS TO SEE THAT YOU HAD POSTED ANOTHER CHAPTER. THIS IS MY ALL TIME FAVOURITE AFF STORY. Sigh. And it was a damn good chapter too. (NxS, oooh yes).

Can't wait for the next one.

you rock.
person Anon
schedule November 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
HOLY SHIT! Dude, I saw your review on my thing, and I was like blah I'll go say something on Top Floor (still didn't notice the update), then I hit "Latest" again and was like WTF, look at that! Oh gosh this feels good. Like old times, ne? I was thinking cuz I was getting ready to take a shower JUST before I saw it had updated, and I was like singing in the shower I was THAT excited to have you/this story back. Aww my little real life Sasuke counterpart thingy!

Write, okay you wrote, I will review. I have lines I actually IM myself, one is too long so I won't put it, but it's what Sasuke said to Naruto about pushing him away because of his condition and how he won't stand for that. And yeah the part about the stabbing the bug w/ the crayon. Shika is so cool, and I love when Sasuke is emasculated like that in front of Naruto. Wait, here, though lemme see where that thing is I sent myself...

"The truth was that he had just wanted to get out of intensive care as quickly as possible, and the easiest way to do that was to convince everyone that he was the complete opposite of depressed and suicidal. So, true to form, he slapped on an idiotic grin, played a few pranks and was declared an insufferable clown."

OMG you know how I love an angsty/angry Naruto who drops his front, and that hit the nail right on the head there. And I was like FINALLY. And how you described why Sasuke and Naruto's relationship worked... I was like hell yeah. And that's why they are so special together! And oh when Naruto said that he and Sasuke were over my heart broke into a million pieces, but I was like, if I were in Naruto's condition I would a. be pushing away people, too and b. because of all my problems I would've thought a lot about how my actions affect others. But oh yes, Sasuke the hero comes in to save the day. And DUDE DUDE DUDE, that scene in the bathroom. Honestly, OMG. Better than I expected. I would have waited TWO years just for that part. It happened just the way I wanted. I love love love Sasuke in this, he does everything right. And even at the end when Naruto was practically like "Dude, you gotta try this" I was like LOL. Hornballs. Right, and to KandKL...it's really hard to keep my attention on other pairings besides SasuNaru, but I was like loving it. I love how mature their relationship is. It's good because it's a foil to Sasu and Naru... it's on another level. Not better or worse, but well just further along, I suppose. Damn, Shizune was awfully understanding. But that scene was touching. I'm glad you didn't put TOO much emphasis on the booteh (though that was nice)... Shika's gonna hurt like woah. But I liked how emotionally attached they are because it makes their separation so... heartwrenching and cruel.

Anyway, in short. It was awesome. I loved the angst, I loved the SasuNaru moments, and I loved seeing Neji again! I missed Neji a lot, and I hate the seme/uke thing, but I was surprised to see who topped. LOL. But I think that's why I like your Shika so much cuz he's different from the anime and he's not. I like that he kinda seems like an angry old man at times... so to see him vulnerable... rawr. Anyway, I missed you soooooooooooooooooo much. I'm happy to have my rival back! Yay, and it's like old times cuz I'm gonna work on the last chappy of NSTAH this week... awww I'm getting nostalgic. Good work ladies! Hope the sitch is all worked out! (yes I said sitch) Happy turkey day!!!
person Sploooooooooosh!!!
schedule November 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
this is ADHD kid and-OMG!!!! that was so worth the wait...well to me at least, but the smut was over too quickly for me *drools*, and i kinda feel retarded for how hard i laughed when lee said shika murdered the bug...cant wait for the next update!!! PLEEEEEEASE MAKE IT SOON!!!!!
person Donedin
schedule November 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow, this chapter was absolutly amazing! Well worth the wait!! So gald to hear that you guys are back at it again! I really enjoyed the seen with Shika and Neji, and can't wait for the next post!! ^_^
person Cindy
schedule November 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Who wouldn't be happy with the whole piece? Wonderful writing; great story! Thanks!
person Briryan
schedule November 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Welcome back!) Glad things are looking better for you. Wow what a lovin' scene between Neji and Shika. That was good. I really hope that things will work out between the two of them. Really enjoyed the bathroom scene with Sasuke and Naruto. So, so good. I could just see the look on Sasuke's face when Naruto did that. Glad that you didn't have them break up. Can't wait till the next chapter.
schedule November 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I’m lad you are updating again because, I must say, your story is one of the most original I had ever read really, you two make a great team and this result is just cool. I had to confess that my favorite part of your story is the whole ShikaxNeji part of it, but I like it all together, really, is very, very interesting and I’m glad I found it.

Sasuke and Naruto’s relationship is interesting, now that Sasuke has kind of taken the role of “don’t-you-dare-to-leave-me-idiot!” and I like how you write Lee and the others, really, Lee is fun to read.

Now since you asked for a special line to review the ShikaxNeji part, here you have: I founf this relationship very cute, the fact that they had now cling to each other so much, and I feel heartbreaking by the fact they are apart now, yes, it is so sad to see that they are separate, it must be very hard for both of them, still gives you that nice feeling when you read then together, because we’re waiting for it, so is a very nice compensation, so if short words, the ShikaxNeji part was fantastic, they had said to each other that they are in love, so cute and heartbreaking when Neji was taken away again… but hey! I’m sure you have plans for the future.

So, thanks for sharing with us another great chapter and see you later!