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for The Top Floor

by mirandler43

person Sin
schedule July 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Awesome. That was totally wonderful. Good writing skills and over all effect. I totally love it more then words and can't wait for more! ^^ Good job.
person kyuubigirl
schedule July 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Eep! Oh I liked this so much, I am so sad it only has 2 chapters. I like this idea, and I actually haven't read any other stories like this. And I kept thinking of Girl, Interrupted the entire time. (Gee, I don't know why.) But Naruto is exactly what I would expect! I like how you made him the seemingly calm, normal one but inside he's probably the craziest one of them all. I also like how Sasuke's kind of the outsider, and it's easy to see why he gravitates toward Naruto! Gosh I love Naruto in this! I really like all the characters.

And yes, it's already dark, and what's cool is that you're being subtle about what's "wrong" with each boy. You're showing and not telling! That's good, yay! Aww, but poor Naruto, I could just feel it click when Sasuke said Neji looked like he was trying to kill him. Why Uchiha, why put ideas in that cute boy's head? But I am so interested in seeing where this goes! I hope you update soon (the both of you!) Sigh...
person Briryan
schedule July 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow this is getting good. Can't wait to find out what happenes.
person Cindy
schedule July 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I just can't say enough how nicely written this is and how unique it is for the Naruto FanFic genre.

I feel like I have a novel in my hands. It has a potential for character exploration that the traditional ninja stories (which I love too, of course) don't. I am holding my breathe to see where you go with it.

Thanks for yout time and talent! :)
person kaiswings
schedule July 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Akkk Nooo ...wait im not sure what happend...did he attack naruto? but neways great story so far i want it to be Sasukes evauation so we can see more into his mind...and what type of pills he has to take OR he may go all crazy uciha style on Nejis ass muhahahahahahah!

love

Kaiswings
person Hazel
schedule July 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This story is awesome dont stop u guys make mental people feel welcome*snif*sniff* thank you!*_*
person Pho
schedule July 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I think this story has a lot of potential. I wanna know why Sasuke's there. Tell me! Tell me! Good job so far, and I can't wait to read more.
schedule July 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
loved chapter two, too... the interaction between naruto and kiba is very sweet.. and yes sasuke really isn't acting himself is he.. i wonder when we'll find out more about his problems.. and neji! yikes! did sasuke's remark about neji looking like he was going to kill him put the idea in naruto's head to make him do just that? or was that all something else? kyaaa i can't wait for the next chapter! *bounces with impatience*
person dancingkitsune
schedule July 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like this so far, please continue ^ ^
person Trollmia
schedule July 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
It seems to be a new fling in the Naruto-section to write about insanity and mental hospitals.. *smiles* I've seen numerous over at ff.net. Some are better than others and this was one that looked to be a little more thought over. I hope you keep it up in the future... Good luck and I'll keep an eye out for the next update.