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January 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i love the fic, so funny. but poor shika and neji, but at least they got nookie!!
please let me know when you update!
please let me know when you update!
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January 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Awesome story, started reading it today and I couldn't look away ^^ haha Aww Kiba leaving :( well if he's leaving you should bring back Neji, Shika has too much time on his hands...lol oh wait if Kiba leaves Lee would be without a play buddy... and they are funny together... wow... that sad... well Im happy Kiba gets to leave but that means leaving everyone....hmmm.... well anyways before my thoughts decide to run away on me, I really like your fanfic. Very unique, the only one I've read thats like this. Good work!
Take Care!
Take Care!
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January 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ugh, now i havta log in, in order to review. Honestly its so....troublesome since my lazy butt is so used to typing in some random name then reviewing, if this wasnt such an awesome story i wouldnt even bother reviewing at all...
...so...consider yourself no less than a God for having THE Mizukage review your talented piece of literature...gawd i sound conceited....anywho...
another fantastic chapter (and FINALLY a freakin' lemon) i honestly adore this fic. almost to the point of obsession, i also loved the totally unsuspected Sas-UKE, *sigh* but i have to say im upset about our Kiba having to leave-i mean he keeps everything so light and...non-serious, you know? but he has to in order for the story to have a happy ending....right? 'cause in the end EVERYONE leaves and its a happily ever after ending......RIIIIGHT?!?!
one more thing!...if u could so kindly answer this question in an email....is...Itachi going to make an appearance???
ok, ive said all i needed to say, keep up the good work!!! and please try to update sooner, please.
-Yuffie
...so...consider yourself no less than a God for having THE Mizukage review your talented piece of literature...gawd i sound conceited....anywho...
another fantastic chapter (and FINALLY a freakin' lemon) i honestly adore this fic. almost to the point of obsession, i also loved the totally unsuspected Sas-UKE, *sigh* but i have to say im upset about our Kiba having to leave-i mean he keeps everything so light and...non-serious, you know? but he has to in order for the story to have a happy ending....right? 'cause in the end EVERYONE leaves and its a happily ever after ending......RIIIIGHT?!?!
one more thing!...if u could so kindly answer this question in an email....is...Itachi going to make an appearance???
ok, ive said all i needed to say, keep up the good work!!! and please try to update sooner, please.
-Yuffie
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January 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
O_O
So...I thought I had read this ficcy, like the first few chapters, and not really *really* liked it, but so long as there was an update it didn't hurt to take a peek. Then I scanned over the first few sentences, and then I scrolled drown and read a paragraph here and there, and I realized, "I have never read this fic."
So i start reading...and I keep reading...and I make my lunch...and I keep reading...and i make my dinner...and I keep reading (damn I love winter break XD)...and stinking WOW!
This is a really, really awesome fic you have going here. There's definitely quite a few asylum fics out there, but this one is such more different and unique and original and the text just *breathes*. There's so much going on, and yet it's written well with a controlled, nicely-paced flow. There are so many hysterical parts that I just loved, and parts that I just wanted to hug, and during the incident with the knife? So much tension and suspense!
As for the lemon...very possibly the best first time NaruSasu lemon ever written XD loved it, loved it, loved it.
"Well I don't want to..."
"Me either."
Priceless. Absolutely priceless. Your use of detail is fantastic, your descriptions are not too much, not too little, and like I said the text just *breathes*. Absolutely riveting.
One question, though, because some scenes have confused me: How old exactly is Kiba?
with that I will say...
UPDATE :3
(though I've gathered from your a/n's that may take awhile T_T but that's a-okay because quality and length make up for it.)
So...I thought I had read this ficcy, like the first few chapters, and not really *really* liked it, but so long as there was an update it didn't hurt to take a peek. Then I scanned over the first few sentences, and then I scrolled drown and read a paragraph here and there, and I realized, "I have never read this fic."
So i start reading...and I keep reading...and I make my lunch...and I keep reading...and i make my dinner...and I keep reading (damn I love winter break XD)...and stinking WOW!
This is a really, really awesome fic you have going here. There's definitely quite a few asylum fics out there, but this one is such more different and unique and original and the text just *breathes*. There's so much going on, and yet it's written well with a controlled, nicely-paced flow. There are so many hysterical parts that I just loved, and parts that I just wanted to hug, and during the incident with the knife? So much tension and suspense!
As for the lemon...very possibly the best first time NaruSasu lemon ever written XD loved it, loved it, loved it.
"Well I don't want to..."
"Me either."
Priceless. Absolutely priceless. Your use of detail is fantastic, your descriptions are not too much, not too little, and like I said the text just *breathes*. Absolutely riveting.
One question, though, because some scenes have confused me: How old exactly is Kiba?
with that I will say...
UPDATE :3
(though I've gathered from your a/n's that may take awhile T_T but that's a-okay because quality and length make up for it.)
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January 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I can't believe it! People are mad at you for making Sasuke uke? SASUKE UKE IS HOT! I mean, I love when authors remember that life isn't as black and white as uke and seme. It's two boys/guys/males/testosterone factories, I doubt in real life that gay guys always stick to bottom or top their whole life. I'm sure they enjoy trying both. And I was so happy you made Sasuke uke with Naruto! *hugs you tightly*
I loved this chapter and envy you so much. When Sasuke and Naruto start having sex in my story, I want it to feel new and awkward but hot, to. And I have no idea how I'm going to manage that. XD Maybe I could use you as beta then? To read and tell me what you think? That and I'm still a little inexperienced when it comes to writing lemon scenes. *fidgets nervously*
But boy I had a laugh. Shikamaru is SOOOO evil and he SOOOO did what I would have done. XD The Lee and Kiba lightening fear thing was cute as hell, to. But...what did that german word Scheibe or whatever mean? I know it was probably something naughty. XD *waves semuke flag above both Sasuke and Naruto's heads* Don't let those wussies at FF.net get to you! ^_^
I loved this chapter and envy you so much. When Sasuke and Naruto start having sex in my story, I want it to feel new and awkward but hot, to. And I have no idea how I'm going to manage that. XD Maybe I could use you as beta then? To read and tell me what you think? That and I'm still a little inexperienced when it comes to writing lemon scenes. *fidgets nervously*
But boy I had a laugh. Shikamaru is SOOOO evil and he SOOOO did what I would have done. XD The Lee and Kiba lightening fear thing was cute as hell, to. But...what did that german word Scheibe or whatever mean? I know it was probably something naughty. XD *waves semuke flag above both Sasuke and Naruto's heads* Don't let those wussies at FF.net get to you! ^_^
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January 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love you.
That's...all I can say right now, haha.
Hmm, as for the whole ZOMG UKE SASUKE issue...
I'm not particularly a fan of UKE!Sasuke, but I
wouldn't chew you guys out or BITCH about it for
writing what you wrote. It turned out soooooooo well.
I loved it, and for me that's saying alot since
I usually[like 98% of the time] HATE when Sasuke's an uke.
So, fucking KUDOS to you. Forget all those jerks who just
have to find SOMETHING to bitch about. Immature little
FF.net-ers!
I...can't wait for some SEME!Sauke though. So please have
that for me soon *smirk*.
That's...all I can say right now, haha.
Hmm, as for the whole ZOMG UKE SASUKE issue...
I'm not particularly a fan of UKE!Sasuke, but I
wouldn't chew you guys out or BITCH about it for
writing what you wrote. It turned out soooooooo well.
I loved it, and for me that's saying alot since
I usually[like 98% of the time] HATE when Sasuke's an uke.
So, fucking KUDOS to you. Forget all those jerks who just
have to find SOMETHING to bitch about. Immature little
FF.net-ers!
I...can't wait for some SEME!Sauke though. So please have
that for me soon *smirk*.
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January 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Duuude. I actually had to stop after the lemon to e-mail LG and squee and say how good it was. OMG. I am soooo proud of you, and it was AMAZING. Like beyond meeting my expectations, and to top it off, you surprised the hell out of me by making it NaruSasu by definition. Though, I think, Sasuke's attitude pushes it in the realm of ambiguous, you know. Not entirely equal, and LOL still somehow bordering on more SasuNaru, which is kind of fascinating.
Oh, it was just right, Mirandler, just perfect. It's amazing how realistic it felt *with them*. Like the sort of awkwardness, and especially how they actually talked during the scene. I mean... in real life *cough* you kind of have to communicate what goes where or if something's not working, so I loved that they just sort of did that, and it made it feel natural. It was brilliant really. The details were incredible without making it feel, you know, cardboard sex scene. I would actually say that's one of the best lemons I've ever read. It was a great blend of physical and internal description while also being thoughtful and innocent, but still really really hot. Like Sasuke throughout was just so... Sasuke. And before you said how they were going to do it, I was like... what doggystyle the first time? LOL I was as clueless as Naruto. I was like hm, I guess Naruto could just stand there and Sasuke could back up like a truck? haha. oh it was good, but good forshadowing not only with Naruto and false hope but with whatever's going on with Kiba. That makes my heart hurt and wonder how it will affect Naruto. He could downward spiral, and then he'll freak out because people are leaving, and if Sasuke has doubts, then how will he be able to really comfort Naruto? Aaah. This is so depressing to think about. Hn. I think I detected your like of ShikaSasu in there though or maybe not. I was like, they sure are talkative with one another. Not like really, but I was sorta thinking about it. Anyway, I said I'd do a long review as per usual, so I'll shut the hell up, but dude, it was AWESOME. I'm glad you put so much thought and time into it because it's really really good.
I hope the next chapters come out somewhat easier so you can work on other things if that's what you want XD plus I wanna know what happens to Kiba and if anything gets awkward between Naruto and Sasuke!
Oh, it was just right, Mirandler, just perfect. It's amazing how realistic it felt *with them*. Like the sort of awkwardness, and especially how they actually talked during the scene. I mean... in real life *cough* you kind of have to communicate what goes where or if something's not working, so I loved that they just sort of did that, and it made it feel natural. It was brilliant really. The details were incredible without making it feel, you know, cardboard sex scene. I would actually say that's one of the best lemons I've ever read. It was a great blend of physical and internal description while also being thoughtful and innocent, but still really really hot. Like Sasuke throughout was just so... Sasuke. And before you said how they were going to do it, I was like... what doggystyle the first time? LOL I was as clueless as Naruto. I was like hm, I guess Naruto could just stand there and Sasuke could back up like a truck? haha. oh it was good, but good forshadowing not only with Naruto and false hope but with whatever's going on with Kiba. That makes my heart hurt and wonder how it will affect Naruto. He could downward spiral, and then he'll freak out because people are leaving, and if Sasuke has doubts, then how will he be able to really comfort Naruto? Aaah. This is so depressing to think about. Hn. I think I detected your like of ShikaSasu in there though or maybe not. I was like, they sure are talkative with one another. Not like really, but I was sorta thinking about it. Anyway, I said I'd do a long review as per usual, so I'll shut the hell up, but dude, it was AWESOME. I'm glad you put so much thought and time into it because it's really really good.
I hope the next chapters come out somewhat easier so you can work on other things if that's what you want XD plus I wanna know what happens to Kiba and if anything gets awkward between Naruto and Sasuke!
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January 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
omg I found this fic just tonight and I know I got on this comp at around 11:30pm and its now 7:21am...and I have not read ANYTHING else but mail, which I dont have much of...I was glued..riveted to the spot by this fic..part of me wants to jump for joy, I mean why wouldnt someone want to adopt a big lovable lug like Kiba..but then the hearbreak of being with out Naruto and the others, and the heartbreak Naruto would feel as well...and how about Lee??? oooh man angst galore, and is Naruto truelly getting better?? Shizune wouldn't give him false hope would she?? and I was wondering when Shikamaru's earlier statement about being able to tell when Naruto's next attack might come, would come into play in this fic...and I just have to say one3 thing..from the moment you introduced Lee to the group I couldnt stop laughing my ever loving butt off I mean the whole scene with Sasuke runing to get away from lee then Naruto seeing why Sasuke was so into the race and ran to the Kiba screaming and omg that had me laughing sooo hard, it was a piece of art I tell ya, all of the story is, love the long chapters and I just love the over all interaction, and truthfully this is the first ShikaNeji story or by pairing Ive ever read and I think they are sooo cute together, love em...anyhow cant wait for more but I know you have RL to lead so I shall wait patiently, if you still have that email alert it would be ever so nice of you two to let me know when an update occurs, if not soo k I shall defenitly check back, again ty for the excellent read, huggles and smiles Mija...:-)
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January 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
phew! that was hot. and yet again, though there was a long delay... *pouting* it was well worth the wait. you two are amazing writers. you never fail to amaze, you never fail to interest the reader with the way you create the characters and have them behave with one another. you two are wonderful writers and i really hope you keep it up. and i must say that i'm thrilled that you two did get this updated.
the wait, though long, was well worth it. you two did an amazing job with the story, progressing the plot and moving the characters to where you want them to be (and what a cliffhanger!). and the lemon- yeah. you two totally suceeded with your goal. hot and awkward at the same time. and yay for uke sasuke! you two are amazing. great job. keep up the great quality of work you both continue to produce. i look forward to the next update and am more than willing to wait patiently for the next update.
great job!
~hanyou-elf
the wait, though long, was well worth it. you two did an amazing job with the story, progressing the plot and moving the characters to where you want them to be (and what a cliffhanger!). and the lemon- yeah. you two totally suceeded with your goal. hot and awkward at the same time. and yay for uke sasuke! you two are amazing. great job. keep up the great quality of work you both continue to produce. i look forward to the next update and am more than willing to wait patiently for the next update.
great job!
~hanyou-elf
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January 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was a great chapter!) Sadly the only way to review your new chapter, was to get an account here. So as you can see I did. I myself have really no problem with the fact that this chapter was Naru/Sasu. You are right, one has to find ways around problems and they did. I am sure Sasuke didn't like it but he did it for Naruto. And that is all that counts, right? I can't wait to read the Sasu/Naru one now. Cause this one was very good. Is Kiba really going to be leaving them? I hope he doesn't, but at the same time I hope he does. Looking forward to reading the next chapter.