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July 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
*evil laughter* Oh that was so so so hot! A very good one-shot, and I think that there should certaintly be a sequel!!!!! The only thing I didn't like about this fic, >.< , was the mentions of how Sasuke developed his affinity for really rough dry sex while under Orochimaru's care. Makes perfect sense, but...you know, it's /Orochimaru/ *blech* that snake-b*****d. I don't like him when it comes to Sasuke. But otherwise it was all enjoyable! It's great, too, that Sasuke or Naruto isn't always seme. It's better when they switch. Felt the ending was slightly rushed...but it wasn't too bad.
For a sequel I am quite fond of there being more toys. XD And maybe dessert (whip cream, chocolate syrup, strawberries...fruit, in general). Sasuke doesn't like sweets, but I see no reason for Naruto not to use them. Hmm...dunno what to say as the semi-plot behind the sequel though. Maybe Sasuke wants payback and it backfires? Or maybe you could do a trilogy? *puppy dog eyes* And in the next, Sasuke dominates and they go through roleplay, like Master and Slave, and Sasuke uses some of that famous Uchiha willpower to make Naruto beg? Then, Naruto counters with dessert...and toys...and other stuff. Ok, just throwing ideas out in the dark and rambling on and on. So I'll shut up now.
Keep on writing and I can't wait for a sequel, but take your time. Ah, if I could only know instantly when it came out. ;_;
Kayo
For a sequel I am quite fond of there being more toys. XD And maybe dessert (whip cream, chocolate syrup, strawberries...fruit, in general). Sasuke doesn't like sweets, but I see no reason for Naruto not to use them. Hmm...dunno what to say as the semi-plot behind the sequel though. Maybe Sasuke wants payback and it backfires? Or maybe you could do a trilogy? *puppy dog eyes* And in the next, Sasuke dominates and they go through roleplay, like Master and Slave, and Sasuke uses some of that famous Uchiha willpower to make Naruto beg? Then, Naruto counters with dessert...and toys...and other stuff. Ok, just throwing ideas out in the dark and rambling on and on. So I'll shut up now.
Keep on writing and I can't wait for a sequel, but take your time. Ah, if I could only know instantly when it came out. ;_;
Kayo
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July 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
that was HOTT...deliciously hott!! great fic! cant wait for more!!
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July 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Loved it, the whole story was beautifully written (if it's even right to use beautiful in a smut fic... LOL). The ending was very sweet.
Great job!
Great job!
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July 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was great, amazing hehe though alittle disgusted with 'where' and with 'whom' sasuke first learned to love dry sex but still great fic, i do hope there is a sequel, maybe sasuke gets back at naruto by teaching him to love being the uke with dry sex, since naruto taught him to enjoy forplay and all, and maybe add in some more emotions instead of just the sex though i loved that part muchly lol
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July 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was quite nice. I like the relationship you put them into, it worked very well and of course was verey sexy. Nice job.