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Awwwwww!!!!! This was so beautiful. It warmed my heart. It's nice to read something that is not FULL of angst every once in awhile. I loved it.

I think that I found something to read when I get depressed, your fics are soo sweet that they make me smile, you're an awesome writer and your English is just fine

*sniffles* Ah, it was very beautiful. *applause* It was incredibly deep. By gods, that was some good angst. Normally I love a stupid immature Naruto, but he was so... perfect in this fic. Thanks for writing it.

P.S. Your English rocks! I love how you wrote in first person. Oh, to see things from Sasuke-kun's eyes *dreamy sigh* Kssh! But you've got a few typos though ><

This is GREAT!!! I love the way this one is writen. It's diffrent, yet so easy to read^^ Please do continue writing thing like this? //Kitten

Beautiful fic!! Such poetry ^^ you have quite the talent for writing ^_^

Roligt att se fler svenskar här. Det var lite stavfel här o där... men inget som man inte kunde överse med. Man noterar det just när man läser det och sen är det borta. Jag vet inte vad du använder när du skriver, själv har jag Word och stavkontrollen i den är helt ok tycker jag. Min engelska grammatik är inte på topp men som sagt, engelska är ju inte vårt modersmål. Jag tycker vi gör oss helt ok i jämförelser med många som från både USA och England. Så tummen upp för den här historien säger jag.

Kan lova dig att det är många som undrar vad som står här just nu... *fnissar elakt* Låt dom undra säger jag bara...

the change from you to he at the end interrupts the flow of the story. before that the story is like a running commentary on sasuke's thoughts and feelings on the matter, almost intimately directed towards the reader. when the transition happened, it confused me and my focus altered from the story itself to the fact that something... seemed wrong. seeing as he is more impersonal than you, it also broke the spell on intimacy, which drew me to continue reading the fic in the first place.
of course, this is your story and if you wanted it that way, then well... it is your choice. i just wanted to let you know how it looks from the reader's point of view :)