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OoOoOoOoh! Lol, cool story<3

weirdest pairing...ever

but I am gunna read it...XD

still it's interesting even though I HATE hyuugaincest (but not as much as uchiha incest -___-;;;;) and I love rare pairings

mmm..keep it up..I promise to make constructive critism next time

you actually got me hooked with your writing so far ^_^

what are you talking about...your a wonderful writer. this story is so cute. i hope that you write the rest of it

Alright an update. Neji's cute getting all jealous and over protective. I love it.

...It confused me a little bit.

Lol neji's going crazy.

I really like your story and your grammar is fantastic except that you don't stick with one tense.
EG:

She would like to thank Neji-niisan for saving her from Gaara-sama (a.k.a. the scary kazekage-dono, in her head) but she would very much like to bash him too for divesting her of a leisurely storll.

Right now she could do neither. He is marching her off LITERALLY (if you are within ten feet distance from them, you would hear the slapof their slippered feet against the marbled ground) to her room, his hand firmly clasped on her elbow.


You keep switching between present, the imperfect, and past tense. The story would flow better in the imperfect/past tense.

My GOD! GET TO THE SMUT ALREADY!

Awe that chapter just ended way to quickly. I cant wait to see more. Heh heh.

Hmm i like it 8D i hope to see the next chap soon