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March 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I’m so glad you updated! Thank you!
Can’t wait to read more! :)
Can’t wait to read more! :)
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March 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story. It makes me kind of sad for Hinata and the baby, though. I find myself hoping that the baby is not Naruto's and by some twist of fate he and Sasuke can be together. Anyway, I am loving this story. I can't wait to read more.
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March 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I just started reading this and it's so good! Something about following Sasuke on his boring everyday tasks just amuses the hell out of me. You should also know that you are responsible for my soon to be broke state, I've been wanting to get a snake for a couple years now, but now I MUST. Please update soon?
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January 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This fic is awesome! I love it!
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December 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
this is really depressing SINCE U HAVENT UPDATED IN SOOO LONG!!! T_T
i lvoe ur fic, its so damn good!! ur riting is really god like and i hope you'll update
a bit faster, coz b4 u were updating like everydaii :P u mgiht have a life out side of fanfiction but i dont !! haha i do but u know :P just really like this fic, n would be please if there was a chappiie up soon, at leats b4 christmas
i lvoe ur fic, its so damn good!! ur riting is really god like and i hope you'll update
a bit faster, coz b4 u were updating like everydaii :P u mgiht have a life out side of fanfiction but i dont !! haha i do but u know :P just really like this fic, n would be please if there was a chappiie up soon, at leats b4 christmas
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November 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey. Wanna say I really like your story, yadda yadda. But I bet you hear that all the time so I'm going to move on to the things I -don't- like about the story.
First off is the OOCness. I mean yeah it's an AU, so there HAS to be some, but not as much as there is. Especially in Sasuke's case. The only resemblance he has to the anime Sasuke is his name. I think it's cause you're incorporating your OWN personality into him (judging soley from what I know about you based on your author's notes).
Secondly is the prolonged details you go into about things that aren't really neccesary in the advancement of the story, like the details of the animals or the jobs that need to be done where Sasuke works.
Next is the likeability of the characters. Main characters -are- supposed to be likeable. But portraying Naruto as a player, especially when he's with a pregnant girl and stuff like that isn't helping me like him. And Naruto's usually my favorite character, and part of that is because of the values he has in the manga/anime.
And the last thing is the lustyness (or lack of it). In the latest chapter Naru and Sasu started gettin dirty, but you don't show Sasuke having any attraction towards Naruto so it seems pretty improbable. The story doesn't really PROVE that there's something like that developing between em, just companionship. They're together a lot in the story but it doesn't really show em forming a bond. Naruto isn't such a great guy, and Sasuke hasn't got the hots for him, and there's not much of a bond, so why would Sasuke end up with him?
But anyway, thank you so, SO much for taking the time and effort to post fanfictions. Part of the reason I'm into Naruto so much is cause of the fandom and ppl like you who take the time to entertain us. Please cotinue this fic!
First off is the OOCness. I mean yeah it's an AU, so there HAS to be some, but not as much as there is. Especially in Sasuke's case. The only resemblance he has to the anime Sasuke is his name. I think it's cause you're incorporating your OWN personality into him (judging soley from what I know about you based on your author's notes).
Secondly is the prolonged details you go into about things that aren't really neccesary in the advancement of the story, like the details of the animals or the jobs that need to be done where Sasuke works.
Next is the likeability of the characters. Main characters -are- supposed to be likeable. But portraying Naruto as a player, especially when he's with a pregnant girl and stuff like that isn't helping me like him. And Naruto's usually my favorite character, and part of that is because of the values he has in the manga/anime.
And the last thing is the lustyness (or lack of it). In the latest chapter Naru and Sasu started gettin dirty, but you don't show Sasuke having any attraction towards Naruto so it seems pretty improbable. The story doesn't really PROVE that there's something like that developing between em, just companionship. They're together a lot in the story but it doesn't really show em forming a bond. Naruto isn't such a great guy, and Sasuke hasn't got the hots for him, and there's not much of a bond, so why would Sasuke end up with him?
But anyway, thank you so, SO much for taking the time and effort to post fanfictions. Part of the reason I'm into Naruto so much is cause of the fandom and ppl like you who take the time to entertain us. Please cotinue this fic!
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October 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Well you have a great story line going on here. I am curious as to how you are going to play this one through.
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October 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I just can't help but love this fic! Great job! ^^
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October 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i love this story... i adore it. did i enjoy it?! are you kiddin' me?? i loved it ! :D please uptade! pretty please with sugar on top! :D
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September 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You're shitting me right? They just go around the bush and keep doing that! I love the story, but it's starting to get to my nerves!