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Well...the kidnapping part i like.
i imagine hinata doesn't really think that way though...

Aww, I was just getting into this story.. >.<; gah.. Update soon, k. take care.

Gaara is MAJORLY OOC here. Please fix that, and then you will have a perfectly wonderful and enjoyable fic on your hands! ^^

i love this fic it has a very gooood start to please update it

awsome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

wui!! when will you update your fic?? i'm already excited you know... X3
what will happen next?? what will happen next?! waaaaah!! X3

who the hell is maraku?

*moraku

“I’m sorry, why are you angry at me?” I think that's where I stopped reading. I'm sorry, but... what the hell? This story is just... I can't find any words that won't insult you, so I'll just say what the hell. At first, I thought this was supposed to be sexy or something by the summary, then I changed my opinion to comedy once Gaara kept hitting the top of Hinata's head to knock her out or something (I can just imagine it as something from South Park when Cartman tried to kill his friends with a wiffleball bat and it didn't do anything), but then I realized you were being serious. I have to say I kind of felt bad for laughing when I thought it was comedy

Hello. ^_^ Don't worry... I'm not a flamer. I like your imagination, and I think that a violent pairing between Hinata and Gaara definitely has some potential, but the fiction itself was a bit rushed to me. Is this your first try? For your first try, it's not overly terrible.

You might want to try getting a Beta (a person who reads over your fics, helps correct grammar and throws you ideas to make it better, and try getting an MLA handbook and doing some practice runs. Also, Microsoft word has a pretty good grammar checker, and it helps with spelling too.

Look up some online about Naruto. Do your research on Gaara's and Hinata's personalities. A great site to looks stuff up at is http://www.wikipedia.com They have everything you could possibly want to know about Naruto! Also, try http://www.absoluteanime.com

Great try...and I'm sure that you'll get better as time progresses. Good luck!

To the other jerk off reviewers:

Instead of being asses and telling her what she sucks at with no help, why don't you give her some pointers? Maybe a couple of sites she can visit to help her work out a little? What a bunch of rude ass douche bags. God I'm ashamed there are people like you that read stories on this site. Give a good review for once. God.