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August 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i'm really more of sasunaru rather than narusasu... but that was adorable and sweet... so i loved it anyway! *GRIN* thank you very much. *hug* love you! *kiss*
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August 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
It's very sweet but i don't like the idea that the kids are about 12 years old in this fic..
Love it anyway ^.~
Love it anyway ^.~
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August 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Not bad, you are off to a very good start. Try being a little more disriptive when it comes to actions. Sometimes it took a lilltle too long for me to actually visualise what was happening. But I think the more you write the better you will get so, don't give up.
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August 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
WOW that was very nice. very well written, good grammer. I can't wait to read more of your fics. keep up the good work. :D
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August 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I liked your story. It showed the truth about how things can really be and how they can really happen. Good work.
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August 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like the story. It had an interesting starting plot, though not altogether unexpected and I thoroughly enjoyed it. :) Jaa.
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August 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I liked your work!
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August 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
yah, so one-shots don't tend to get many reviews... I wouldn't sweat it. It was good, really, as in really good. =) If only that had happened...
I do pray you write more.
*smile*
I do pray you write more.
*smile*
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August 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Im exactly like you when it comes to the reviews thing. What really kills me is that you'll have like, 700 hits and only 3 reviews. *bangs face on table* But yeah.
I liked your writing style. The comment about Sasuke likening fangirls to being mauled by a bear was VERY IC, which basically = love. ^_^
For some reason these lines:
His eyes opened again to catch the ones opposite him. Naruto lay next to him, watching him, unblinking, a strange expression on his face.
Really caught my attention. It seemed like something that Naruto would do, instead of them just moving into sex.
Thanks for the nice read, hope to see some more.
I liked your writing style. The comment about Sasuke likening fangirls to being mauled by a bear was VERY IC, which basically = love. ^_^
For some reason these lines:
His eyes opened again to catch the ones opposite him. Naruto lay next to him, watching him, unblinking, a strange expression on his face.
Really caught my attention. It seemed like something that Naruto would do, instead of them just moving into sex.
Thanks for the nice read, hope to see some more.
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August 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I liked it a lot. it was simple, pretty fast but i still loved it, it was hot lol. that about sums it up... very very hot. lol :D no more?