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Uh..yeah, that was freaking hot as hell. You write really great lemons or maybe I'm just a sucker for dirty talk and sex in the shower, but damn it!

yeah i know how that feels, i have 3 stories on ff.net that are ummmm dead at the moment and it makes me feel SOOO bad. but hey, when there is nothing then there isnt. but anyhow... a plot line. well lets see, ano, orochimaru (sp) *stupid creepy snake...* i dont think that he would give up on sasuke that easily, and there has to be a reason as to why he took him in, i mean he didnt and as far as i know doesnt give a shit about itachi. and hmmm why would he be demanding another rabbit anyhow? but then again what better way to get back at sasuke than destroying or at least damaging the reason for his leaving. hint hint *Naruto* since you made him out as being so innocent and well yah different from everything sasuke knew, wouldnt he be the perfcty means of destroying sasukes resolve? or maybe itachi pops into the picture, since naruto doesnt know about him, but lets say that itachi knows about sasuke and sanke guy and sasukes plans for his untimely death and gets mad * i mean who wouldnt?*, so then he knows about naruto, so yah once again a *lets get at sasuke through naruto* plan. you never know, abduction, torture, as used before rape, umm i dunno about murder that might suck, but hmmmm what else could yah do... well i shall leave yah with that then lol.

see the peoblem i have is that i have a never ending supply of plot bunnies, but i am either a) to lazy to write the story b) decide that it suxs half way in c) lose interest/ inspiration or d) just dont have time.

well i hope this helps yah out if not let me know and i shall go a hunting and find yah some more ideas! *arg must leave too many bunnies running at me with plots!!!*

dace

omg could you write more Top!Naruto and Uke!Sasuke maybe perphaps with chains or toys? just a suggestion!

*coughs and chokes on drool*

oh my. that was suuuuuper hot. yum yum all the way. i really like this. heee~~~

Love this chapter the shower scene was HOT!!!!!!!!!!!!!! love sasuke as the uke and Naruto as seme. I can't get enough of this story it fucking grate. Hope you get over your writers block soon so you can update with a another fantastic chapter.

Very nice! There were a few errors, but nothing major that took away from the story. Nicely done and hot. ~_^ Now I'm curious, though; where DID this plot come from??

The first chapter was hot! The second one much hotter!! *fans self* the third one......was disappointing. :( Mostly because i hate SasuNaru... -_-;;

(how i wish there was half as many strictly NaruSasu fics as there are SasuNaru ones...sigh)

well, other than that...good fic! :) You have quite a number of typos though, so getting a beta and revising the chapters is very recommended. You also tend to overly use !!'s even when you don't need them. That's the only constructive critic i can think of atm.. good fic, hoping to see more NaruSasu! ^_^

Cute ^^

yay, another great chapter! i'm glad you updated this story.
the last chapter is SO HOT! i need a cold shower...lol
i'm a big fan of NaruSasu, but i like possesive Sasuke!! great job!(^_^)
you are a trlented writer, i hope you can get over your writer's block as soon as possible.
but keep up your own pace...i'm looking forward to the next.

I loved the first chapter now I have to go watch the novie agian . Please give up another chapter soon . I like how you have Sauske turn from his asshole self into a nice submisive uke .