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I LOVE IT! I can't wait for the next part! >_<

You'e right, not much happens, but the rotting chakra was interesting. It's ok if the pace is slow, I'm just glad this story is no longer on hiatus. Look forward to the next update.

good chapter, a lot of intrigue. you have a lot of mistakes in your english, grammer and the forms of the verbs you use. You can understand what you are trying to write, but often you have to rearrange the entire sentence in your head. Just thought I'd say incase you wanted to proof-check your work. Sorry for being such a busy-body! ^^;;

I liked this very much. I'm so happy that you updated ^^

This is pretty good. I'm looking forward to reading more.
Update soon!^^

Wow, finally this story is resurrected! I wouldn't say nothing happened, but it's an advancement yes? I liked it. Itachi is so hard to write for sometimes, i can barely even fathom what goes on through his mind while thinking of or dealing with his family. Can't wait to see what happens in the next chap. Great job.

i like this story though it does lack action, i think that maybe you try to convey a message and a moral, a little too much when you write because it slows the story down a lot and ends up sounding a bit jaded and cliché. I do love your stories, though,iveread a few of them and i like the fact that you seem to take your writing seriously and put a lot of thought into the plot and the plausibility (sp?) of what happens. You keep the characters IC, which can be difficult in new situations that might not happen in the anime/manga. You also give the characters a lot of feeling and emotion which is very rewarding for the reader. but i think that you just need to speed things up a tad, and not linger over some things too much because that can get a bit frustrating when you wait for ever for an update and then nothing really happens, though i suppose it is always good to get some insight into how the character is reacting to the situation. Sorry for the rambling, i just thought that maybed you would appreciate some CC. xx

Awsome! I couldn't stop reading if i wanted to.

Now I remember where I saw that mistake before! Why, who else would be writing this ItaSasu, but Cepheus? lol. One of the things that was in one of your other stories was the word 'phantom' where the word 'fathom' should be. I can understand completely how you could get the two mixed up in terms of spelling, but a phantom is a ghost and to fathom is kinda like 'to believe.' And there were a few spelling and grammatical errors in this chapter, but whatever. It's mainly just the phantom/fathom thing that got to me. I figured I'd let you know, just in case you almost make the same mistake again. If you're annoyed by my constant pointing out of your mistakes, sorry (even that wasn't completely grammatically correct)!

Aha! That was the last one! You call Itachi a 'murder,' but 'murder' is the act of killing. What you mean to say is 'murderER,' which is the person who commits the act. I knew there was one that was missing from the 'bugs me' list! Sorry! I'll stop now!

And the story's still very good. Just so you know, my stories still could never compare to yours. But that's not saying much. ^_^u *sweatdrop* You get my drift though, right?