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September 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow this is a good story but one thing that could improve this story is the use of less elaborate words and composures. I feel like i'm reading a translated shakspear novel teehee but other than that this story follows a really good plot!!! keep up the good work!
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September 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i'm really digging this story. i want you to update soon! i want sasuke to suffer 'cause he's an ass, i want to see sakura fall in love with kakashi... please don't make me wait too long!!
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September 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Nice second chapter. I look forward to the next installment.
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September 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hi. Nice beginning. Looking forward to more.
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September 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
soooo good....more more more more more. I did really enjoy it though. The pictured that you painted was filled with such carnage, but at the same time hope. I really hope that the next chapter comes soon.
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September 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful description and rich language. I could almost see the battlefield through her eyes. I look forward to reading more.
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September 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Dude!!! This is friggin awesome. I can't wait to read more
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September 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
A bit depressing so far, but well written. :) You've set an interesting mood. Will it continue? I look forward to seeing where you take this. Looks like it should be an interesting and creative story. Not the same ol', same ol' kind of the thing. (Not that I don't like those too) :) Nice work so far.
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September 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow. That's all I can say to this. What a fantastic beginning to what I'm sure will be an amazing story. Your description of the settings, as well as the flashbacks, was precise and beautiful. You effectively conveyed each character's thoughts and emotions with excellent skill. Not to mention the premise of the story, which is enthralling from the first moment. I can't wait to see where you take this! Update soon! ~Lily
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September 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i really like this first chatpter... it's full of promise and intrigue. i can't wait to see how this is going to evolve. i love kaka/saku stories! you have a great way with words that makes the story seem to be playing out in a big screen in my mind's eye. awesome! update soon please!