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i'm so sorry that i didn't review before. i thought i did. gah, i've got a crap memory. anywho, it's a sick day for me! yeah, i get to stay out of school. hm, anyway, this chapter was really cute. i love how sasuke gets jealous of naruto hugging everybody. it's sweet, and i could care less if they're in or out of character. i don't know too many ppl that can keep them in character during any kind of story. plus, its nice to see them act differently sometimes.

hope u update soon, and good luck in ur class,
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"He supposed he could not shower or comb his hair, and wear scruffy wrinkled clothing, but he was a Uchiha. Uchiha’s DON’T wear scruffy clothes and allow their hair to go to hell. And they most certainly don’t shower."

Ah yes, the Uchiha. The smelliest clan of them all. (laughs)
Seriously though, I know that someone has already mentioned this in a previous review, but you REALLY need a beta. I've only read the first chapter and have already noticed numerous spelling/grammar mistakes.

Hey hey! See, I told you I'd get around to reviewing! Sorry it took me so long...This chapter was fun. I liked seeing Sasuke forced to realize what was going on internally. He could only deny it so long. I liked seeing Sasuke as a more responsible figure in the scene with Hinata and Naruto. He's not bossy, but still firm, like he's more grown up than them. I also love the reasoning you showed behind Sasuke's compulsive need to clean. With Sasuke, he doesn't say much, so you have to find a way to show the reader what's going on without using dialogue, and you did well. I laughed when Naruto was finally understanding about ramen and cake not mixing. Sasuke? Ramen bowl?? I can just see Sasuke's face if he could have heard Naruto's thoughts...All around, good story, good concepts. I caught a few errors (since I'm anal like that). If you're interested, I can let you know what they are. Just email me. And if you are ever in need of someone to proof, or even just bounce ideas off of, I'd love to hear from you.

ps: thanks for the review at TTF! :D

I was laughing so hard when I pictured Naruto's apartment completely covered with cooking stuff! It was an awesome chapter, I was starting to wonder where you where, but you updated and it was great! Keep them coming!

Aww! But Naruto seemed a little stupid in this one, rather than just innocent. A bit slow on the uptake...but he is pretty cute. And damn, I wish my fridge had what I wanted in it every time I opened it...

Kawaii!!! I can still imagine Pita-ten style art of them while reading and it's adorable. Please continue soon! I can't wait for the next chapter.

Ths is an awesome fic, I really enjoy it. I really like what is going on with Sasuke and Naruto, can't wait to see how you get the nookie going ^_^. Post soon!

ok first things first i am loving the story. it is so light and fluffy, maybe even frothy? or better yet like punken makadamia nut fluff with a brownie and some vanilla icecream (yeah i missed dinner today) anyway i am really enjoying this story and i cant wait for the smut! (which i totally agree tastes better with a bit of plot)

this is just tooooooo cute! i loved when naruto called the crowbar an "evil thing of death" and i loved even more your whole ramen-ramen bowl analogy. i have never laughed like that this late at night before! this story is precious, and i can't wait for more. i don't do fluff so well, so i'm awfully glad when someone else does ^_____^

Gah! Sorry! I don't review as often as I should. I never seem to have anything really helpful to say since I am not a very good writer myself. I like the premise of the story though and enjoy reading each chapter, even if life delays them. Good luck with school and I can't wait to read the next chapter.