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Great chapter. I think the length was perfect. I was checking how far through the chapter I was every couple of paragraphs because I was so scared it would be over. You can't imagine how happy I was to see that I wasn't even close to being done. Also, I'm normally left unsatisfied when the chapter is done, but that didn't happen here. You ended the chapter perfectly and I feel like I could wait a while for the next long chapter.

I love how possessive Sasuke is and the general plot. I'm also happy about the mpreg 'cause I love it when Naruto's a mommy^.^

Oh, I forgot to metion, sometimes, you don't use contractions where it's really needed. Naruto wouldn't really say 'I am' 'I would not' The lack of contractions makes it seem like he's speaking slowly and seriously. Also, it kinda curbs the overall flow. Just as a general rule, don't use contractions in speech unless the speaker is trying to emphasize something.

Heh, just some constructive criticism there. I really love your style of writing and the fact that you have minimal grammar and spelling errors. The contraction thing is just a suggestion to help out with the characterization, since speech is so important for that aspect^.^

Nice. This is intelligently written, with some nice images. Sasuke's got emotion without being out of character, and Naruto's amazing thus far. I'm only on Chapter 3, but it looks wonderful. Thanks for writing this. Keep up the good work.

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This update was sweet! Maybe i'm just evil but it's always a trip for me to read about a pregnant Naruto, Sasuke made sure he gave it to him lol. I can't wait to see what you have in store for them. Tight work! Update soon!

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that was so sweeeet. and suspenseful! and hawt! and the length of the chapter is just perfect. it's not short, and it's not too long that i'd find myself asking when it was gonna end. it was just right! and the content was so very, very good! and i can't wait until the two find out naruto is pregnant! and is there a special meaning behind kyuubi's seal being burned into sasuke?

i love this story so much! please update soon!

dddaaaaammmmmnnnn. this fic is soo hot... lol. i really really like this story so far and simply cannot wait for more! i will be checking every day for more of this story, simply because i love it. i also love your portrayel of both naruto and sas'ke. love!
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Great chapter!) I like the idea of long chapters, but not the idea of a long wait. Can't make up my mind. Wants both. Can't wait till the next chapter.

I love this fic!! Please continue!!!

I readed this first on fanfiction.net, and then I had to run to get here to read the uncensored part. I like both.
And I was Laughing my ass off when Tsunade wants to take Naruto, and here comes the blue flash Uchiha, snatching him and growling. Current mood: Possessive... XD

Anyway, I already gave you a list of names, Yuki (snow), Yugi (game), Shizuka (quiet)...
I'm known as Dragon's Storyteller in FF.net, here, I am the Dark Toy.

And Hopefully, you'll be soon reading my first Naruto fanfic!!!!

TAKE CARE AND UPDATE SOON!

Nicely written.