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for This can't be happening!

by nekochannya

person Anon
schedule January 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
well, hopefully when Tsunade does his exam and tells Naruto that he is pregnat, will he tell Sasuke? Hurry with the next chapter!!
schedule January 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
AwesomeStoryUpdateSoon
schedule January 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hmm...sounds to me like Naruto-chan is pregnant...but that doesn't explain Kyuu's absence! What did you do with Kyuubi? Is she okay? If she's hurt that means that naruto gets hurt more easily! Please bring her back! Please? Sasuke is great in this story. My heart goes out to him when he begs. It's so hot. Anyway I'll check again later for updates! Ja ne!

Ash
person vicki
schedule January 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
more please. it's so good.
person vicki
schedule January 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
At the end you said this was going to become a MPreg fic. Now, I dont usually read but your story is so good that I will have to make an acception. Keep Writing!
person Donedin
schedule January 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I thought this chapter was done really well, really kept everyone in character ya know? I can't wait to see what you have in store, and no the chapter was not to long, long is good! ^_^
person XZanayu
schedule January 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Naruto is such a baka!! Going on a mission when he's pregnant and doesn't even know it! What happens if he gets hurt and loses the child? What will he say then and what will happen to his and Sasuke's relationship? He's soo busy thinking about a mission, he refuses to see a doctor and unknowinly, putting his and Sasuke's child at risk!!
person kikiko
schedule January 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
this was really good I'm liking the development!! good work...

I think you should do away with the 'Sasuke's POV', 'Kakashi's POV', etc. the story flow is broken and jagged when you do that. Find a way to switch POV's during the scene or do a scence cut...that would make the fic that much more enjoyable XD

kiki
person Trisha
schedule January 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was a great chapter! Nice and long to. Please update as soon as you can.
person wendyghost
schedule January 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ahh, poor naruto he fainted! sasuke is going to be so mad! good chapter.