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Not a bad fic. It's entertaining to read, although quite slow.

Nice update please continue. Who will be next on the couple's list. Hinata and Naruto, Sakura and Sasuke or is it Kakashi and Sakura

Wow, great fic so far. I cannot wait for the next update. I am glad to hear that you are writing a novel. I have often found myself wondering why some of the aff authors were not using their abilities to write books instead of fanfics. If you need a beta reader for any future chapters or for any other fics you write just ask and I shall be more then happy to assist. All emails can be sent to Nameramthgin@hotmail.com (lol, thats a tough one to remember, isn`t it?"

*A dark brooding figure looks over his shoulder* "Time to leave chibi-namer."
*A small terrifying little mass of shadows looks up with a disturbing grin on its face*
"Time to find more smut?" It asks inquisitivly, a look of hope apparent in its psychotic eyes.
"Yes little one, time to find more smut."
"Yay!"

Two words: More. Now. Great writing, I wouldn't care if there was no lemon in it at all. In any case, for the constructive stuff, a few more romantic hints would be nice. Story's excellent, but the relationships seem to stand still.

This story has a great start about there defenses being repaired then they have to fight six renegade shinobi from Sound and Mist was it... But now your showing Sasuke out of character in the last chapter but nothing to bad and keep up the great work send me an e-mail when you update please.... JTB8834@aol.com

So what is going on witheveryone andbeing Jounin accept Hinata.. She will be Jouninafterthis mission is a success.. Naruto stillis oblivious to how she feelsa round him still... He needs to get his eyes opened and then he will see the one person that loved him for a long time...E-mail me when you update and we could talk if you want

Well written. Good sense of humor. Continue please!!

I really like what you have so far. You shouldn't berate yourself so much in your author's notes...because you really don't have a reason to. :) I love plot...so please don't think it's a bad thing that you aren't getting to anything significantly adultish yet. Sometimes I think that there is pressure to provide that lemon, but I think more in actuality there are times when plot is so much nicer (especially when written as well as you have set up).

I can't wait for the next chapter...I hope that it comes soon.

Interesting. I'm very intrigued. You've got a great start here and I can't wait to see what happens next. Update soon!

Seems like it's going to be a good fic,continue soon!
Also, How oold is everyone in this fic?