rate_review Reviews

Wow, thank you for putting it up. Even if you say it's a rough draft, I'm still very impressed. It may only be limey , but the chapter was very beautifully written. It had sensuous language to it. I don't know if I'm saying it right. It may not have been graphic but it was still very tittilating. As for the title, hmm, I see what you're saying. At the same time it still fits in well with the ending analogy you made. I honestly couldn't give you any better ideas. Thank you again for posting the story! I truley enjoyed this, it is a beautiful oneshot.

Generally I don't like Hinata. It is not that I dislike her character in the series, I just hate how she is written in fanfiction. I love the added dimension that you give her here. I look forward to seeing how this relationship builds, please continue!