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December 2, 2012 at 12:00 AM
love it, it would be great as a multi-chapter fic
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April 18, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Excellent fic, a pleasant twist to a classic pairing with a nice dose of plot. Other than a few spelling errors none of which were too distracting great job. Keep this stuff up.
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October 19, 2010 at 12:00 AM
It was really good. I loved reading it all the way through, not just the smut scenes.
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March 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Okay, so, you don't really need to worry about writing lemons, because you are made of win. Awesome work! Up there in my top 10 fics from this site! The fluffy bit with Hiashi(and his subsequent revenge) was my favorite part, outside the sex(which was great, too). No one ever uses him in a NaruHina, unless they revealed Naruto's lineage. And this is the first time I've read a story where Naruto only had an average length for his age, rather than an obnoxiously large, oh-god-I-want-to-kill-him-so-bad, hell-this-guy-is-HOW-old?!? dick. lol So thanks for that, too. If you ever need a proofreader, I'll gladly help. I'll shortly be making an account(kinda silly not to have one, what with how much I frequent the site) and it'll use this e-mail, so just drop a line if you need one! Keep up the good work!
~Ja ne!
~Ja ne!
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September 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
wow im surprised at myself for reviewing considering i dont like to. oh well on to critism. This story has some great potential as well as some flaws. I loved the fact that this isn't just another naru/hina smut. I thought that the idea that she would of gone and seen anko in the first place was a little OOC but i quickly got over it with graphic sex. I liked how you did hiashi's reaction it was not "IM GONA KILL NARUTO DIE DEMON" yet it was still cold hearted hiashi. I really hope you continue this story.
With much respect,
The Prince of Madness
With much respect,
The Prince of Madness
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August 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
John Johnson recommends this fic. It is extremely hot and very well-written.
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January 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Could you please write a sequal?
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September 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh,My God.
That Was SO Beautifully Written.And So HOT!
I'm Not A Fan Of Moresmes,Yaoi,AND Yuri...But I Loved What I Loved.
You're Incredibly Skillful At Writing. ^^
That Was SO Beautifully Written.And So HOT!
I'm Not A Fan Of Moresmes,Yaoi,AND Yuri...But I Loved What I Loved.
You're Incredibly Skillful At Writing. ^^
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August 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
My god, i can not read this story enough times. One of my favorite stories of my favorite pairing, excellent work!
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August 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i wish you did make this a longer fic cause this one is stinkin awesome