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Hey I loved the fic cuz you hit everything right on the money about all the characters... That was something that is a great feat to do... I hope you make this into a real story not a one shot cuz the ending you can carry on to their training session and their great activity during the night and how Anko became their Jounin

ya, this was really well writen. little younge but i think you should continue it. make a story out of it, i think you could do it.

on second though forget the last one from me. i reread it again and i think it is one of the best lemons i have read and its been really hard to find a good one of naru/hina. hell its one of the best fanfics that i have read and belive me i read a lot. i dont really think you could make it any better so please make it into a story or just write more. you definetly have tallent.

What else is there to say? I think Timeshifter covered everything perfectly. This is perhaps one of the BEST Naru/Hina, and maybe the only one on this site. I think it would be a down right shame if you did not continue with it, or at least make a sequel. This place is lacking in quality stories like this, and the number of Naru/Hina are about as scarce as dodo bird.

I really loved ths story I would love to see more to this story

Amazing! That is single-handedly the greatest lemon I've ever read, and one of the greatest fics I've ever seen. That's saying a lot considering I beta-read for DameWren's Two Halves and Demon Sunrise: Welcome Home by Yamineko Hyousai. Anyway, I loved this story; the character devolopment, the interaction, the smut, and everything else. Are you planning to write again? I know I'd love to see a a sequel to this, or perhaps a look into the future when they're 18 or so, but another fic would be nice too. You've definitely got a talent, and I hope you put it to use.

P.S. - Have you considered posting this on fanfiction.net? You'll likely get more reviews there. Just be sure to rate it M.

Also, my email is timeshifter@twcny.rr.com, since that's apparently hidden. Once again, thank you for the NaruHina lemon; those are SO hard to find these days, and a well-written one is all but extinct.

If you criticize yourself one more time, so help me God I will hunt you down and skin you alive. Jokes aside, I have to say that your fic most definitely stands among the very best of which I have read, which is no small comment, since I very much hate to give 'sugar reviews'. Not only is your story a HIGHLY original spin on a pairing which has been written on by more experienced writers, and written with less care for craftsmanship in terms of plot development and other such characteristics as makes a story good in essence, but your powerful and efficient command of the English language empowers the story in terms of form. Even if your optimal command of the English language is not as strong as is seen here, you must be commended, in that case, for following the advice of your proofreader, whose presence already sets your story in a select group of writers (believe it or not, having and listening to a good beta is an asset and skill that very few have). While it is possible that you will never recieve a high readership, remember that the number of readers means little; few will know or care about Britney Spears and Jay-Z in perhaps another ten or so years, unless they are our generation recalling our childhood habits, but such bands as Dave Matthews' Band and U2 will likely be retained in societal memory for decades, if not generations (Spark Notes version: great craftsmanship beats out popular culture any day of the week). I remember you mentioning at the beginning of your fic that you had multiple unfeatured pieces lurking on your computer. I recommend you drudge them up and set to work on chiseling more jewels from the raw ore of your mind. Since it seems your proofreader was both eager and skilled at his assignment, I recommend asking for their help again if you have any doubts.

And remember... being skinned alive.

That was a dam good fic probly the best i have ever read. loved it

You want my honest and brutal opinion?

THAT WAS ONE OF THE BEST NARUTO LEMONS I HAVE EVER READ!!!!

In fact, the only one other that compares is the original version of the Naruto/Tsunade/Shizune Project.

This was definitely the best NaruHina lemon, and those are so damn rare, you can't imagine how happy I was to find yours. I really, REALLY hope to read more from you, especially if you are going to get those two into threesomes with another girl or woman ^_^.