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aye, it was worthy. me liked it very much. especially the scene in the blacksmith's shop... and shower. hehe... please update soon.

-inc

Well, I can certainly understand an artist’s need for perfection, but to be honest, I rather liked the fourth chapter. It was sweet, and teasing, and definitely set up the plot very nicely. You did a wonderful job with foreshadowing and I look forward to see what surprises you still have in store for us, your beloved readers. I will without a doubt be reading the next chapter, especially seeing as you said it will be getting into “the meat and potatoes” part of the story. Regardless, my best wishes for you and your writing.



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Well take this for what it is worth but I thought you did a good job on the chapter. I like how you gave some history of Naruto and the blooming of Sasuke's feelings for Naruto. Can't wait to see what you have in mind next for the story.

Fun, I liked this chapter, it was nice.

It's been quite awhile since I've read anything good on here, and I've been soooooo busy with school. And believe it or not, my mouse is broken, so I can only type to you using computer shortcuts and all. Anyways, WOW. *giggles madly* Before I forget to say, that fourth chapter was wonderful. Don't change it one bit. It was so perfect. And even if Sasuke or Naruto may see ooc, this is an AU story and as an Author, you have the right to make them into the very characters that they are. Can Naruto be seme ^^ Please. I love it when Naruto is seme. *tries to not dound too desperate* Fine fine. It's your story after all. The plot is forming nicley and I love the describtion of Naruto's Kyuubi form. He's the smex ^.~

Now, I would read over for grammatical errors or spelling mistakes, but the fact that my computer mouse is not working will make the task quite troublesome. ANd normally I'd give a more thorough and full review on a great story such as yours, but I find that it's a bit difficult when I have this McAfee SecurityCenter web service box open in the middle of my screen with no way of closing out of it. I can't even see what I'm typing right now, but so you know. It's so frustrating. I have to buy a new mouse tomorrow. It's been broken since yesterday afternoon.

heh. See how I can get so off-topic? ^.^' Keep up the great work. I'll be really looking forward to the next chapter.


Have a Nice Day and Happy Writing!


~Ria ^.~

Again an awesome chapter, I wonder what will Naruto do now that he knows that Sasuke knows, and what will Sasuke do too. I wish that Naruto became a ninja of Konoha though... and for the book, if you can, you should totally write it!

That was great. I love what you are doing and this is wonderfully written. I can't wait to see more. Keep up the good work.

....Um Sasuke cant use Kagemane No Jutsu. Im pretty sure its a secret technique only taught by the Nara family that cant be copied by the sharingan. But the storyline is interesting so update soon.

Wow, this is an amazingly well written story, and I would love for you to see it to its end. It has so much potential to become a really grat story, not that it's not one already. How could you leave off on such an excruitatingly tension filled moment? Boy, what a cliff hanger! I love this story so much! It's very original and new, and I love how you've portrayed the characters! Naruto is slowly melting Sasuke's heart, and he barely even knows him. How sweet! And Sasuke's mask is slowly breaking, but only around Naruto. Even the little thoughts Sasuke has about buying his teamates gifts was expertly woven in there to show how much he's come to care for Naruto in such a short time, even moreso than his teamates who he's known for 10 years! A question, though, about Naruto. If he had met the blacksmith before when he saved him, wouldn't the blacksmith recognize him when he became his apprentice? Or does the blacksmith know he's the Fox and helps him keep his secret. And will we find out more about how Naruto came to end up in Rehei and how he left Konoha? I hope you have something planned, because I would love to know what happened. Anyway, awesome start to your story, and I hope you make this a long one, with lots of plot and character developement. You could have Sasuke and Naruto work things out here, and then get Sasuke to convince Naruto to come back with him to become a shinobi, and then you get lots of angst and tension and character developement as Naruto, with the sealed Kyuubi, tries to fit in with the people that would most want him dead. Just a thought. Oh, and what's with all the ninja's after Naruto? Will we find out about that too? I can't wait, so please update soon! You can't leave me hanging there! This story is amazing!

gah, you just had to stop it there, didn't ya?! man, i want to know what sasuke's gonna do now that he knows. please update soon. this is really good. i espcially like how sasuke's 'emotionless' mask is falling.

can't wait until the next chapter!

-Inc