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for Moonlight

by blueinu

person Summer
schedule November 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I Luv it update soon and send me the next chapter it's Beloved701@hotmail.com
person Ruby Lips(not signed in)
schedule October 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Not bad, for a first attempt. It was a little rough around the edges, but a beta can help you clean it up. It was interesting, amusing and decently done smut. I also like the twist at the end, though it could have been worded better.

This is a good first story, something you should be proud of. I'll wait to see what happens next.

Good luck and keep writting.

Ruby Lips
person Cesia
schedule October 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
AHHHHHHH!!!! I want more! That just drew me in automatically. I'm really looking forward to reading more. Hope you update soon.^^
person trippy
schedule October 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
GAAAAAAAAAAAAA! you cant leave it there you must update whenever
you get the chance :)