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December 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That was an awesome story! Can u write a narusasu shower smex one? I would love it if u did.
Thanx!
Thanx!
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January 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
(I review as I read.)
Curious beginning. . . . I like their argument, although I think Sasuke looks way better in black. . . . Heh. “Why couldn’t the bastard just relax and enjoy himself?” Because he’s a tightass, Naruto! ^_^ . . . Boy, you’re a pretty good writer. . . . Hah! Cute touch about Sakura stepping on the sash. ^^ . . . Mmm, zippers, yes. Sasuke, you should get some tight zippered clothing. ^^ . . . Ahaha, no, that wouldn’t be good. Watch it, will you, Naruto? . . . Interesting sentence: “Sasuke shot him a look that clearly called into question [. . .] all in one devastating blow.” I like it. . . . Ooh, another good one: “[. . .] to see Sasuke’s face start to close like a thundercloud.” (*Ahem* I like Sasuke, that’s why all the comments on him. *blush*) . . . Okay, this paragraph confuses me: “It had hurt him the last time he persuaded Sasuke [. . .] and a pissy boyfriend to deal with.” Huh? . . . (*snort*) Yeah, I would yell at you, too, for that, Naruto. . . . Boy, that is awesome. . . . I like Naruto’s thought: ‘Come on, bastard.’ . . . (*snigger*) “I am the Hokage of sex!” XDD Good one. XD . . . Ohh, Sasuke, you’re going to regret that promise; he’s not going to get you black, blue and/or white clothes. . . . Red leather? Uh, I . . . dunno, Naruto. Well, maybe. . . . Hah! Cute ending. ^_^
Alright! I like this one! You should write more like this!
Curious beginning. . . . I like their argument, although I think Sasuke looks way better in black. . . . Heh. “Why couldn’t the bastard just relax and enjoy himself?” Because he’s a tightass, Naruto! ^_^ . . . Boy, you’re a pretty good writer. . . . Hah! Cute touch about Sakura stepping on the sash. ^^ . . . Mmm, zippers, yes. Sasuke, you should get some tight zippered clothing. ^^ . . . Ahaha, no, that wouldn’t be good. Watch it, will you, Naruto? . . . Interesting sentence: “Sasuke shot him a look that clearly called into question [. . .] all in one devastating blow.” I like it. . . . Ooh, another good one: “[. . .] to see Sasuke’s face start to close like a thundercloud.” (*Ahem* I like Sasuke, that’s why all the comments on him. *blush*) . . . Okay, this paragraph confuses me: “It had hurt him the last time he persuaded Sasuke [. . .] and a pissy boyfriend to deal with.” Huh? . . . (*snort*) Yeah, I would yell at you, too, for that, Naruto. . . . Boy, that is awesome. . . . I like Naruto’s thought: ‘Come on, bastard.’ . . . (*snigger*) “I am the Hokage of sex!” XDD Good one. XD . . . Ohh, Sasuke, you’re going to regret that promise; he’s not going to get you black, blue and/or white clothes. . . . Red leather? Uh, I . . . dunno, Naruto. Well, maybe. . . . Hah! Cute ending. ^_^
Alright! I like this one! You should write more like this!
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October 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hahahahah! I read two great fics, then look! IT'S THE SAME AWESOME author. LOL! Another great job!
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October 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was great
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October 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
haha~
me likey!
..loves ur fic!
so hot!
sasuke in orange!
kewl~
i loved the idea that the fic's kinda about naruto trying to be bottom..
..couldn't help laughing when he said he was the best bottom ever and that he didn't complain 'bout shit like sasuke did..
hehe..
did i say it was hot?
^^
me likey!
..loves ur fic!
so hot!
sasuke in orange!
kewl~
i loved the idea that the fic's kinda about naruto trying to be bottom..
..couldn't help laughing when he said he was the best bottom ever and that he didn't complain 'bout shit like sasuke did..
hehe..
did i say it was hot?
^^
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October 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
oh. my. GOD! that was hilarious. i can't believe he threw out his clothes, but the thought of sasuke in red leather with zippers... MMM! i love it! that was so hot. thank you. oh! i loved the 'i'm the hokage of sex' line. it was perfect!~
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October 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like it !!!
good job
good job
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October 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh...i loved it! I liked the way you wrote Sasuke holding back, it keeps his character real. But, that little 'Hokage of sex' got him to loose control...*smirks*...yet another battle lost to the fox!
Thanks for posting,
SeveredWings
Thanks for posting,
SeveredWings
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October 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ok... I must admit that the fic's title didn't drag me into it, it just didn't scream "Read me!" if you ask me, but the story itself was worth the time it took me to read it. Good job!