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for Cloud on My Tongue

by desolatebutterfly

schedule December 13, 2017 at 12:00 AM

This is so tragic! I could really feel Haku's torment in this. My heart bled for him, but also for Zabuza. Because Zabuza is suffering so much in this, too, feeling like he can't let Haku get any closer and trying to deny his love for him. Beautifully cruel fic! I nearly cried.

schedule January 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
wow. incredibly well written and OH how SAD.

AND it shares it's titale with a Tori Amos song? this cannont be a coincidence, can it? (I adore Tori Amos btw.^^)

I really enjoy your stories though they are short ;)
person oohshiny
schedule December 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
awwww..... uh 1 question, even tho i know why you put it like this, but if zabuza reeeeeeeally wanted haku like that wouldnt he've just... urr... TAKEN haku-kun? i mean haku im sure would be willin, but zabuza dun seem like the type of person to restrain himself from..... yeah.
schedule September 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
T__T poor Haku.......that was really beautiful wow...
person emery
schedule December 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
guh.....drools......um give me a moment to compose myself. this is just too beautiful for words. great work and i hope that next time you will write a story will lots of smut between these two pairings.
person Keba-kun
schedule December 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OoOoOoOoOoO...i loved this! This is so sad, but i wanna hate it, but i love it. ~Ja ne~
person Kei
schedule November 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Respect for the ending since most people would have had those two sleeping together pretty quickly after the whole reciprocal-feelings-realised thing. The characterisation was above average for the most part. Realism was a bit lacking in the masturbation scene and distracted me from the good points of the previous part.
person Grey
schedule October 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That's kind of sad...I thought they were gonna get together in the end :( Instead, he's moved from the room :P Poor Haku ::hugs Haku:: Great story, tho! Absolutely adore it!
person -Cyanide Jellybean-
schedule October 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
More fic ._.
schedule October 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love your stories!! They are all so angsty! Poor Haku. *cries* Haku is my fav char other then Naruto. You should write a one-shot with them. Keep on writing!!