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August 24, 2010 at 12:00 AM
(I review as I read.)
Really good opening, and great description of the train of Sasuke’s thoughts and actions. ____ “Rage reddens Sasuke’s eyes …” I like that response to Itachi’s words, even though Itachi didn’t say anything super-provoking. (But with Sasuke, anything’s provoking, of course.) ____ Heh—I like Itachi’s delayed response and his even voice. ____ Aha. That clank surprised me. ____ “The better question would be, what has he done with us.” Lol. ____ Hehehe, love Kyuubi’s entrance. ____ “… misting the place with a fine spray of blood—and reaches out in tendrils like flame.” Really good descriptive line. ____ Ooooooh … “Power to save you, although I don’t think you’re worth it.” Ouch. ____ Cool visualization on the effect Kyuubi’s laugh has on Sasuke. ____ I wonder if Sasuke would actually consider it working with his brother and not, er, “using his brother to get out of this situation”. It would probably be the same thing, but I wonder if Sasuke would let himself think that. ____ Something else—Sasuke’s trying to keep Kyuubi distracted while Itachi does … whatever. But how does he know that Itachi’s going to not just run off and leave Sasuke there with the Kyuubi? He probably doesn’t know and is taking a gamble. ____ Ahaha! Nice try, Itachi! XDD ____ Elation and intense rage. There’s a volatile combo. ____ Yay, Itachi getting pushed around. ^^ ____ AWW DAMN! I was hoping for a more graphic part with Itachi! DAMN IT! ____ I like Kyuubi’s tempting deal and Sasuke’s rage. ____ I like the part when Sasuke bares his throat and how Kyuubi responds. ____ Considering how quickly Naruto resurfaced, it makes me wonder if Kyuubi will keep his word (not that he really gave it) about taking the memory. ____ Actually … come to think of it, it might’ve been a fake promise anyway, if Naruto wouldn’t have remembered it anyway. ____ Heh—Itachi got away. Lol.
Really good! I prefer longer lemons, but hey, whatever works. =) And as frustrating as it was, I like how Itachi just laid there and took it without a struggle, vs. the choice Sasuke was given.
Really good opening, and great description of the train of Sasuke’s thoughts and actions. ____ “Rage reddens Sasuke’s eyes …” I like that response to Itachi’s words, even though Itachi didn’t say anything super-provoking. (But with Sasuke, anything’s provoking, of course.) ____ Heh—I like Itachi’s delayed response and his even voice. ____ Aha. That clank surprised me. ____ “The better question would be, what has he done with us.” Lol. ____ Hehehe, love Kyuubi’s entrance. ____ “… misting the place with a fine spray of blood—and reaches out in tendrils like flame.” Really good descriptive line. ____ Ooooooh … “Power to save you, although I don’t think you’re worth it.” Ouch. ____ Cool visualization on the effect Kyuubi’s laugh has on Sasuke. ____ I wonder if Sasuke would actually consider it working with his brother and not, er, “using his brother to get out of this situation”. It would probably be the same thing, but I wonder if Sasuke would let himself think that. ____ Something else—Sasuke’s trying to keep Kyuubi distracted while Itachi does … whatever. But how does he know that Itachi’s going to not just run off and leave Sasuke there with the Kyuubi? He probably doesn’t know and is taking a gamble. ____ Ahaha! Nice try, Itachi! XDD ____ Elation and intense rage. There’s a volatile combo. ____ Yay, Itachi getting pushed around. ^^ ____ AWW DAMN! I was hoping for a more graphic part with Itachi! DAMN IT! ____ I like Kyuubi’s tempting deal and Sasuke’s rage. ____ I like the part when Sasuke bares his throat and how Kyuubi responds. ____ Considering how quickly Naruto resurfaced, it makes me wonder if Kyuubi will keep his word (not that he really gave it) about taking the memory. ____ Actually … come to think of it, it might’ve been a fake promise anyway, if Naruto wouldn’t have remembered it anyway. ____ Heh—Itachi got away. Lol.
Really good! I prefer longer lemons, but hey, whatever works. =) And as frustrating as it was, I like how Itachi just laid there and took it without a struggle, vs. the choice Sasuke was given.
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June 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
If you write a story that's all Kyuubi-possessed-Naruto topping Itachi, I will love you forever!
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September 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm so glad I found this fic again. Sorry I didn't review the first time a read it so long ago. u.u You write very well. Your stories are all so engaging...it pulls right into the world you're ceating. The ending was awesome. It leaves you wanting more but it's fine as a oneshot.
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October 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Please update. Is Naruto going to be haunted by the actions of the Fox? Does Sasuke like Naruto that way if he was thinking that it was Naruto doing those things to him?
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October 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was hot!!!
I like that VERY much!!!
I hope that this will not be a oneshot!!! please tell me that its not a oneshot....
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....that would like make me cry and stuff....
***sniff sniff****
Your great!!!
I like that VERY much!!!
I hope that this will not be a oneshot!!! please tell me that its not a oneshot....
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....that would like make me cry and stuff....
***sniff sniff****
Your great!!!
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October 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Damn it, you're such a talented writer! I love all of your fics. This one almost gave me a massive nosebleed, haha!
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October 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I never saw this on LJ. :)
Powerful, and very twisted, is how I would describe it. I liked the ending, and the more noble view of Sasuke you presented in this bit, where his concern for Naruto is more tangible. On the other side, I also loved the way he turned away when Itachi was being raped, not because he was disgusted, but because he was, somehow, jealous. Very nice!
Powerful, and very twisted, is how I would describe it. I liked the ending, and the more noble view of Sasuke you presented in this bit, where his concern for Naruto is more tangible. On the other side, I also loved the way he turned away when Itachi was being raped, not because he was disgusted, but because he was, somehow, jealous. Very nice!