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August 24, 2010 at 12:00 AM
(I review as I read.)
Lol, what the hell. Naruto says one word and Sasuke suddenly gets all pissed off. XD
Okay, this is kinda funny. One moan causes them to start screaming and bitching at each other and it’s GAME OVER. XD Frustrating, but funny.
Jeez. What is it with the silence. I don’t think Naruto’s too happy. ____ Soooo … why is Sasuke so intent on Naruto being quiet, even while in the middle of it? õ.ô Does he lose his hard-on or something? ____ Heh—clever. Covering Sasuke’s ears. Though he must be pressing very tightly if it’s blocking out all sound.
Huh. Strange, but interesting. Gotta say, it sounds exhausting when Sasuke initiates.
Huh? “They?” I’m confused. ____ Sooo … does that mean Sasuke’s possessed? Or are they like demons of his past? If that’s the case, wouldn’t his sex be like angst sex? Why would he want to keep them? Sorry, I’m really confused. ^^;
Lol, what the hell. Naruto says one word and Sasuke suddenly gets all pissed off. XD
Okay, this is kinda funny. One moan causes them to start screaming and bitching at each other and it’s GAME OVER. XD Frustrating, but funny.
Jeez. What is it with the silence. I don’t think Naruto’s too happy. ____ Soooo … why is Sasuke so intent on Naruto being quiet, even while in the middle of it? õ.ô Does he lose his hard-on or something? ____ Heh—clever. Covering Sasuke’s ears. Though he must be pressing very tightly if it’s blocking out all sound.
Huh. Strange, but interesting. Gotta say, it sounds exhausting when Sasuke initiates.
Huh? “They?” I’m confused. ____ Sooo … does that mean Sasuke’s possessed? Or are they like demons of his past? If that’s the case, wouldn’t his sex be like angst sex? Why would he want to keep them? Sorry, I’m really confused. ^^;
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October 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
*cries* You are so good!! I'm reading all your stories in a row and they all make me want to cry!! This story is so unqiue and perfect.
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October 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Nice one-shot. I liked it. :) I'm still a bit confused, but not really. I would change the very last "They" to "Them" when you talk about hearing the demons scream, because it is the word that you use above (I think that is what confused me...the change of the pronouns that threw me)
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October 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
GOD...I twitched at that last segment. You wrote that so well and brought it all together perfectly. I'm still twitching.
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October 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
whoa that was intense. like, amazing intense. nice work.
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October 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Who are 'they'? I dont get it. Please explain.
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October 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love your story, yet I'm confused on something. Is them Sasukes family or is he just crazy? And why does he want to hear them scream???
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October 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Okay. Blink blink blink blink blink. And whoa.
Yeah, you've got these guys down-pat, in my illustrious opinion. >.> lol.
Finger-paint bruises, is that what you said? What a fine mind you have.
I'd say more but I just ran my mouth to you ten minutes ago, after I read "Placebo". A lot of what I said there applies here.
lol genius.
- DeeDubya
Yeah, you've got these guys down-pat, in my illustrious opinion. >.> lol.
Finger-paint bruises, is that what you said? What a fine mind you have.
I'd say more but I just ran my mouth to you ten minutes ago, after I read "Placebo". A lot of what I said there applies here.
lol genius.
- DeeDubya