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January 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I honestly dont know why this story dosnt have more reviews.
I have a request. One it would be lovely if stray got updated...yea wrong one i know and i understand how long it can take to update. Two i would like it i mean really like it if you wrote about the first time with Sasuke and Naruto like you had mentioned, then bring Sakura into it. Prolly wouldnt stay in threesomes but thats cool. Im actually not a HUGE yaoi fan but i like the way you write.
I have a request. One it would be lovely if stray got updated...yea wrong one i know and i understand how long it can take to update. Two i would like it i mean really like it if you wrote about the first time with Sasuke and Naruto like you had mentioned, then bring Sakura into it. Prolly wouldnt stay in threesomes but thats cool. Im actually not a HUGE yaoi fan but i like the way you write.
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October 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow well i think this story was amazing, as far as your reader expirence goes it is a well made and introspective fic that brings to mind somthing even greater then the manga and anime expirence, truly if the manga was liek this it would hurt the eyes.
I feel the only thing really lacking is the tactile, your charcter development is superb but i find that your imagery is somewhat lacking. Its like you went so far one way making the development happen so well that the expirence was somewhat lost. You never even said if sakura had an orgasm. Did she? was it good? Or did she not and was she a little dissapointed or fine with not having one for once? What really drives her to be with naruto when the sex is so obviously uncomfortable and she has to share him with Sasuke?
And also since this is naruto fanfiction and you cant expect everyone to follow the same literature/entertainment you do some backgroud on your different themes would be nice. You cant punish people cause they might not want to read the rest of your work or that they dont like the varying themes you do, they might still really enjoy this one expirence. Thats not a come down on you just one of my expirences
But i have to say this is one of the best threesomes i have read in a long time and i liked it so much i had to go over and read your other naruto story and stay up for hours and hold off dinner just to finish it. i think your writing is amazing and please keep going.
I look forward to contnuing work from you
Happy writing
krickets
I feel the only thing really lacking is the tactile, your charcter development is superb but i find that your imagery is somewhat lacking. Its like you went so far one way making the development happen so well that the expirence was somewhat lost. You never even said if sakura had an orgasm. Did she? was it good? Or did she not and was she a little dissapointed or fine with not having one for once? What really drives her to be with naruto when the sex is so obviously uncomfortable and she has to share him with Sasuke?
And also since this is naruto fanfiction and you cant expect everyone to follow the same literature/entertainment you do some backgroud on your different themes would be nice. You cant punish people cause they might not want to read the rest of your work or that they dont like the varying themes you do, they might still really enjoy this one expirence. Thats not a come down on you just one of my expirences
But i have to say this is one of the best threesomes i have read in a long time and i liked it so much i had to go over and read your other naruto story and stay up for hours and hold off dinner just to finish it. i think your writing is amazing and please keep going.
I look forward to contnuing work from you
Happy writing
krickets
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October 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
So very awesome. I love the awkwardness, the hesitant atmosphere. Makes it much more um...geez, it sounds weird to call something that includes feathers and non-humans and "knots" realistic. XD
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October 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Loved the story . I think Ihave read Vert Ninjas but even so can I have a link to it?
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October 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow this is really interesting...definitely a different kind of SasukeXNarutoXSakura story...i still dont understand what the 'knot' means...but okay....and Naruto's half dog?? @_@ I'm very confused here??? hehehe...but still it was very well written...so update soon please!! seeya....^_~