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August 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
(I review as I read.)
I like the initial image in the first paragraph. ____ Boy, he’s mean. The imagery in this is pretty good so far. Like that part where Itachi smeared the blood across Sasuke’s face. ____ LOVE the description about the Mangekyou activating Tsukiyomi. :heart: ____ Another good one: “Pulling an image out of his own mind, and offering up to his brother.” Like showing him something out of Pandora’s Box or something. :heart: ____ “His own cobalt eyes shining in arousal.” Cobalt is actually a shade of blue, not black or grey. ____ Very nice lemon. This whole scene makes me think of my favorite color combo: red and black with hints of white/grey/silver. ____ Hmm, that ending was mean. To me it was unnecessary, but it still made a bit of an impact, the slaughter falling on Sasuke’s birthday.
This is going on my Rec List for a while. I loved the descriptions. =)
I like the initial image in the first paragraph. ____ Boy, he’s mean. The imagery in this is pretty good so far. Like that part where Itachi smeared the blood across Sasuke’s face. ____ LOVE the description about the Mangekyou activating Tsukiyomi. :heart: ____ Another good one: “Pulling an image out of his own mind, and offering up to his brother.” Like showing him something out of Pandora’s Box or something. :heart: ____ “His own cobalt eyes shining in arousal.” Cobalt is actually a shade of blue, not black or grey. ____ Very nice lemon. This whole scene makes me think of my favorite color combo: red and black with hints of white/grey/silver. ____ Hmm, that ending was mean. To me it was unnecessary, but it still made a bit of an impact, the slaughter falling on Sasuke’s birthday.
This is going on my Rec List for a while. I loved the descriptions. =)
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August 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Lol, just realized I already reviewed this as Chapter 2 of Forsaken. I thought it sounded familiar. ^_^;;; Well, anyways, this review was slightly different from that one.
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November 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Their eyes are not grey.I sence alot of hate here, whether it's for the characters or for the readers or for kids I have no idea but its not erotic to me ( well as none erotic as a naked Sasuke can be).I am not into humiliation so if I missed the appeal on that level I apologise(sp) .I base this sense also on the fact you don't seem to know much about the massacre sooooo..But its shouta so its dicey to write anyway yah? "Happy Birthday"? Poor Sasuke,I just feel its physically impossible too,Sasuke wasn't stupid or unaware.I'm picking sorry.Thank you for writing,wanna take your claws out on me I have a jail (yonge) Sasuke fic on lj under the name Campurr, , so have at me!
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October 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Omg that was an awsome fic. I loved it.