rate_review Reviews

I like this story a lot. Please continue!
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So far this story is great. I'm anxious to read more, find out Sasuke's goal, and see what happens with the...uh...semi-happy couple.

Wow, in regards to your note at the bottom of the chapter, to be perfectly honest I thought that you were going to have Naruto and Sasuke get married in a chapter or two, and then the fic would be all about the problems of an unwanted marriage and how they steadily move towards falling in love with each other (after much angst of course!). I feel a little silly now that I realize that that is not where you were taking the story at all. Actually though, to me at least, I think the story would be loads more interesting if the plotline was about them falling in love while they are married. It's a plotline that not many authors dabble in which I think is such a shame. Personally, I think that you could do a lot more with the storyline if it was focused on what happens after they get married. However, you are the author and therefore the creative license of this story solely belongs to you.

In regards to the chapter itself, I thought it was rather interesting. You’ve certainly created enough mystery about Sasuke. I completely agreed with Naruto when he said that he wanted to know all about this man of mystery as well.

I think though that its time to build up a little mystery about Naruto, and add a little suaveness and confidence to his character. I understand that you want Naruto to be light-hearted and open, but I think that if you showed another side of Naruto it would make him an even more interesting character, more interesting to Sasuke as well. I also would say to look over your chapters when you’re done with them because there were a ton of grammatical errors in this chapter. Either that or I suggest a beta reader.

Regardless though, my best wishes for you and your writing.



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hey love ur story, very creative. well i think it should be continued still after they get married, it makes it all the cuter. sorry about your keyboard hope u work it out. yayayayay ^^

You have a good start here. Please update soon.

i really like this story, please update soon!!

hey, so i wanted to say it's a great story so far, sasuke seems even more mysterious than usual and i wanna read more and watch how this all unfolds, see if naruto finds out sasuke's inner secrets, if/how their relationship evolves to more than friends or friends with benefits :p and i definitely think the story should continue past the marriage.. oh and i'd read this whether there's mpreg or not but since that was sorta the point of the marriage/alliance i vote FOR mpreg.. ^__~

the marriage and beyond!!!! cuz i love m-preg's there just so cute, keep up the good work

the story should go past the marraige, I want to read about their kids!

I vote for the story to continue! ^_^