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October 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
When will they mate will naru get preg
I want them to mate next ch.
I want them to mate next ch.
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October 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
pretty good even though you did kill naruto oh and by the way the third hokage is dead we are now up to the fith hokage the third died during oracimarus asult on the leaf villige before saskae ran away, still a good story though and maybe you could go into a little more detail in the lemons
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October 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Well I hope you know how many errors are in your story.
1: Her name is SAKURA. Not Sukara. Two the Third Hokage tied when Naruto was close to 12, So another problem there. Not only that but the fact that Sakura is the third best Medic-nin in the world would not make her poor. I dunno. Your story is just so inaccurate with typos that it's hardly enjoyable. It's good storyline except for the issues.
1: Her name is SAKURA. Not Sukara. Two the Third Hokage tied when Naruto was close to 12, So another problem there. Not only that but the fact that Sakura is the third best Medic-nin in the world would not make her poor. I dunno. Your story is just so inaccurate with typos that it's hardly enjoyable. It's good storyline except for the issues.
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October 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like it. You have created the seeds of a great plot with lots of room for erotica. I can't wait to see how Naruto and Sukara get together to make Keiko and what are you going to do with all the built in anger and rage inside that little girl?