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I've really enjoyed this story and I can't wait to see what else happens in it. :)

I loved it alot, and yes, please do make a sequal. I think, because your almost through with college they should be too! They're comming up in the world, not bothered by 'Rochi and his gang/cult, when they're making their peak in their career, the cult comes back into the picture!!! ooooo, dramatic, then again i have a flare for the dramatics. =) But newayz it's your story, like you said we could suggest, but you alone are the mistress of Lullaby's. :D have fun, and i'm waiting with excitement!!

How to continue this you ask, well first off to contine with is what is Orochimaru and his cult gonna do with Naruto-kun. I'm really curious about that, as well as Sasuke's probable possessivness with Naruto while trying to protect him from the cult, I'd really like to see that =D! Otherwise you're the author write the story as you please, oh and congratulations on you almost finishing college quite a feat there (^-^thumbs up!).

Well, considering the cult chasing Naruto. I think that probably both Sasuke and Naruto will join or at least prepare themselves in a way for Protection.
Let's face it, Sasuke as the possessive and Pridefull Uchiha he is, he won't let anyonw touch HIS dobe.

And Naruto will have to face some of his fears, He will need to do do if he wants to surive.

Kakashi will do the guardian and teacher rol, he always be seen like that.... Maybe some Iruka appearence will do good on him? LOL

As for the rest, I believe Itachi might have been turned into a vampire, but he's probably a free spirit as well. So he might be working on his own... And he'll be probably behind Naruto's soul. But Maybe, if am correct and everything is about Kyuubi, the he might want to unleash the true nature of Naruto's soul... (And there might be some Itanaru >.>.... <.<.... >.< I LOVE ITACHI)

Orohimaru, will always be Orochimaru...

Tsunade might have some of the appereance. And I'm thinking tha the people that dissapeared, was probably connected with naruto in a way... And if it is so... then the cops will start showing their faces...

Anyway, those are my theories, and I do hope that they'll be of some use for you.

I'll be waiting to see what you do! UPDATE SOON!

Great story! I would love to read more. So yes to a sequel please and thank you. Could you please email me when you do write and post the sequel? Thanks.

I'm hoping you don't take this the wrong way but I felt compelled to point this out. In a prose story (which is short stories, novels, etc) the plot progresses in a rising order. Introduction followed by conflict followed by rising action followed by the climax. After that a resolution occurs. The problem with this story is that there are simply to many conflicts that never meet with resolution. All writers have their own methods on how to time out the elements to a story and their perceptions on what a resolution entails but what you have here wouldn't fit into any method or perception. You've created a basic plot structure and even though it is both compelling and well written there is nothing here that can be remotely qualified as a completed story. I imagine you think that this 'sequel' you "might" write as the conclusion to the other conflicts that you have presented here but that is an absurd notion since you are suppose to resolve those conflicts within the constricts of the story you introduce them into. I, personally, couldn't classify this as even a short story but more of a tease made by an author. Which is a shame.

Matte! I wanna know what the heck happened! So yeah I wanna know please! something_hypnotic@yahoo.com e-mail me when u get a chance!

What you can't end it there......I want to know what they want with naruto. please god please update .................or um well.......sequel.....I want a sequel......anywho...lol I love this story so much. ^^ What I loved the most was the fact that you scared the crap out of me.....every chance you got. Hell this story gave me the shivers...........Well you gave me the creaps....(shivers).......not to mention......I cryed when shadow was fighting to protect naruto with his life........I'm such a BIG time animal lover.....and when he got hurt. God that made me cry......Anyway please keep writing......Cause I want to keep reading. ^^ Lol latter................And may that latter come soon. ^^ see ya.
Kisses ^_~
P.S
O and I almost for got......Lol thanks for the YAOI!!!!!!! ^_^
Kisses ^_~

Sequel my dear... You can't leave the public like this. Orochimaru is still out, probably loooking for the soul of Kyuubi. We have a possessive Uchiha, a lost older brother (Who, I might add, has some background for being a mass murderer) So.... yeah...
I WANT THE SEQUEL!