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February 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
i really enjoyed reading this....the sex was HOT..seriously
i love dominantseme!iruka....i liked the way he took control...maybe next time kashi can return the favor? XD
i also liked how they didnt know each other...and how kashi just walked past iruka without even noticing it was him...
kashi is already calling iruka 'his'...lol...oh man i cant wait to see how they will meet again....and hopefully it will keep escapating towards a relationship....
you did a marvelous job please update soon...i will be waiting on the edge of my seat for it ^__^
i love dominantseme!iruka....i liked the way he took control...maybe next time kashi can return the favor? XD
i also liked how they didnt know each other...and how kashi just walked past iruka without even noticing it was him...
kashi is already calling iruka 'his'...lol...oh man i cant wait to see how they will meet again....and hopefully it will keep escapating towards a relationship....
you did a marvelous job please update soon...i will be waiting on the edge of my seat for it ^__^
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October 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
*guh* Seme Iruka is ... so ... hot. And I love you for making a Pt II to this!! Reliving all of the hotness through Kakashi's lust-filled eyes was perfect. Great work on this so far; I /can't/ wait for Pt 3! Ummm...sorry about the short review...I'd have more to say but you melted my brain!! XD
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September 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
just read the first part....i'm half asleep cause well yeah...but i liked it.......it was good......Iruka as Seme....cool........not done too often....
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April 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story, and I'm looking forward to seeing how Kakashi deals with Iruka in the future. XD I'd also like to know Iruka's reasons for the anonymity. :P
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March 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
2 great chapters - do you plan on continuing this story? Would love to read more.
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February 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wha... uhm... I mean... "sigh" There you have it. You took my ability to form actual sentences and flushed it right down the toilet. This is one of the best stories I've ever read and believe me... I read A LOT! Please update soon! I'm biting my nails here and I'm not even a nailbiter! Keep up the good work!
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February 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is very good. I wood love to read more. Please update. :)I would be forever grateful.
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November 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was just wonderful. Your writing style was anything but boring, and I love how descriptive this was.
I'm eagerly awaiting your next chapter. ^-^
And I love the idea of Iruka having nipple piercings, it actually seems to fit into his character.
I'm eagerly awaiting your next chapter. ^-^
And I love the idea of Iruka having nipple piercings, it actually seems to fit into his character.
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November 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
okay.. so i was going to review your first chapter, i just didn't expect a new chapter so soon. >> or am i just not on the computer enough? xD
the first chapter.. well. i loved the pairing. dear lord it was brilliant.
i swear it was this story...but whatever. if it's not, i'm sorry for my bad memory. if it was, you fixed it already. >> there were just too many mistakes for my liking for you saying you had a beta. but i went make and read the first part again to make SURE i had the right one. because why tell you to improve upon something you don't need to. >> but anyway. the only thing i found was one spelling error. xD
so yeh. lol. that's NOT going to make a difference unless you're like me. *cough:perfectionistic:cough* >>
so, really.. the *only* thing i have a comment on for that part - both really, is the use of "cum" and "cuming". if you really love it... fine. but -and yes we had a group-wide discussion about the use of cum/come- .... i think your story so far is far too intelligent for using words like "cum". it is not the standard. and it's not what you would even find in a *dictionary* ... if you care. if you want the proper terms.. go for "come" sweetheart. "cum" is just.. to debasing to your stories. unless you really want.... deprivative slang. because it does have it's uses. this didn't seem like one of them. but it is *your* story.
anyway. >> all that aside... i think i liked the second part better. ^^ it had more feeling and was structured better - it flowed better. you also seemed to have a better idea of what you wanted of your characters. you don't have to know who they are, or show who they are to do that, like you showed in this part with your "mysterious" compliment to Kashi. (i *knew* Iruka was sexy.... but damn...)
but anyway. my review is turning into a mini story. >> so i'll just take my leave.. and be quiet now.
the first chapter.. well. i loved the pairing. dear lord it was brilliant.
i swear it was this story...but whatever. if it's not, i'm sorry for my bad memory. if it was, you fixed it already. >> there were just too many mistakes for my liking for you saying you had a beta. but i went make and read the first part again to make SURE i had the right one. because why tell you to improve upon something you don't need to. >> but anyway. the only thing i found was one spelling error. xD
so yeh. lol. that's NOT going to make a difference unless you're like me. *cough:perfectionistic:cough* >>
so, really.. the *only* thing i have a comment on for that part - both really, is the use of "cum" and "cuming". if you really love it... fine. but -and yes we had a group-wide discussion about the use of cum/come- .... i think your story so far is far too intelligent for using words like "cum". it is not the standard. and it's not what you would even find in a *dictionary* ... if you care. if you want the proper terms.. go for "come" sweetheart. "cum" is just.. to debasing to your stories. unless you really want.... deprivative slang. because it does have it's uses. this didn't seem like one of them. but it is *your* story.
anyway. >> all that aside... i think i liked the second part better. ^^ it had more feeling and was structured better - it flowed better. you also seemed to have a better idea of what you wanted of your characters. you don't have to know who they are, or show who they are to do that, like you showed in this part with your "mysterious" compliment to Kashi. (i *knew* Iruka was sexy.... but damn...)
but anyway. my review is turning into a mini story. >> so i'll just take my leave.. and be quiet now.
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November 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like the alternate point of view chapters. It's interesting to see Iruka as the dominant one. There are a couple of missing apostrophes here and there, but nothing too distracting. I loved the comment about the concussion! Thanks for sharing this!