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January 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 25: Little Error: “We’ll make due.” Actually, it’s “we’ll make do.”
I like it how Sasuke was wearing down a little. I also like the touch saying that ghosts scared Naruto a little rather than all that other stuff.
Uh-oh, I can just tell something’s weird from the first two lines of the next segment. . . . Maybe not.
“Sasuke had the air of one who was making mental lists as he talked.” Good line. I also like how Sasuke says Naruto’s off in “ramen-land” rather than “lala land.” ^^
Oh man, I hope Naruto succeeds in changing Sasuke’s mind about that last bit.
I like it how Sasuke was wearing down a little. I also like the touch saying that ghosts scared Naruto a little rather than all that other stuff.
Uh-oh, I can just tell something’s weird from the first two lines of the next segment. . . . Maybe not.
“Sasuke had the air of one who was making mental lists as he talked.” Good line. I also like how Sasuke says Naruto’s off in “ramen-land” rather than “lala land.” ^^
Oh man, I hope Naruto succeeds in changing Sasuke’s mind about that last bit.
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January 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I LOVE this story though I must say I really hope Itachi comes in and kills the elders. It would be devine justice. And if Nyone could develope a reason for his sudden massacre of the tw odip-shit elders it would be the magnifficent you. ^-^ It would solve everything. ^-^ Please give them A happy ending in the sequal, I will be an avid reader I assure you, and if there is to be no MPreg in this fic I hope they find a really nice girl to be a surrogate mother. ^-^ So the two daddies can raise the kids without complications. ^-^
Great story, made me lose sleep and my boss now hates you but, I Loved the fic and hope to see more of your works.
Lechan
Great story, made me lose sleep and my boss now hates you but, I Loved the fic and hope to see more of your works.
Lechan
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January 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I have thoroughly enjoyed "The Sound of Dreams". I think you are an excellent writer and only one other story (Everyone's got Secrets by Erisabesu) has impressed me as much as yours. I look forward to the sequel. Thanks for sharing.
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December 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Just wrote a long and wonderful review but the page went blank and all was lost! I'm enjoying your story very much and look forward to reading the rest of it. Happy almost new year!
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December 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Love this story so much!!! Well except for Kakashi/Iruka part :( It makes me nervous as this is my least favourite pairing and I can sense it coming... Oh well, still I have to comment on your greatness in making Naru/Sasu pairing believable. I really like it the way you write it - realistic where they both remain strong male characters. I like them together and make sure to miss all sorts of arguments about Naru/Sasu vs Sasu/Naru. I think it's pretty obvious by now that they are equals. As a result I tend to prefer reading Naru/Sasu as most of those stories seem to treat both characters kindly without totally loosing Naruto on the way and making him something he is not. Thanks for no Mpreg here. I love it realistic.
Anyways you are great, I love all your stories and hope you keep updating all of them! Please don't leave us hanging :) OK, I'm back to reading now.
Anyways you are great, I love all your stories and hope you keep updating all of them! Please don't leave us hanging :) OK, I'm back to reading now.
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December 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hey, what do you mean by "the tube was empty"? It's for the sequel, a politico-drama romance?
This fics and your writting is great, please, keep updating the other fics (like Anbu training"
This fics and your writting is great, please, keep updating the other fics (like Anbu training"
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December 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Grrr, this won’t let me review chapter 15! >:( Oh, well. You can see it on your LiveJournal.
Chapter 16: Hilarious first paragraph. XDD Huh, I can’t tell if my prediction came true or not; I guess it did partway, but he didn’t bitch as much as I thought he would. . . . I like the paragraph describing Sasuke’s uneasiness about being lighthearted. HA HA!! “I’ve seen that look on Kakashi’s face before.” XDDDDDD
“Sleek dancer-like muscles” . . . (*thumbs up*) Wow, I love that whole checking-him-out scene. And then the “drooling toothpaste” . . . veeeeery clever. We know what Naruto was imagining, and Sasuke turns and sees that . . . and that probably triggers his imagination! Nice.
Hee hee, “dobe box.” ^^
“Besides insulting me, is there a point to this?” I like that line. That’s a great way to say “Get to the point.” . . . “Bind him closer to Sasuke . . .” Interesting. So, Sasuke, you’ve switched from breaking the bond to tightening the bond. Well, you’re probably right on this. But do you know just how right you are? >:D
Wuh-oh! Naruto, you’re so hilarious. You know that could ruin a mood for this sort of thing? Or give your partner second thoughts?
Chapter 16: Hilarious first paragraph. XDD Huh, I can’t tell if my prediction came true or not; I guess it did partway, but he didn’t bitch as much as I thought he would. . . . I like the paragraph describing Sasuke’s uneasiness about being lighthearted. HA HA!! “I’ve seen that look on Kakashi’s face before.” XDDDDDD
“Sleek dancer-like muscles” . . . (*thumbs up*) Wow, I love that whole checking-him-out scene. And then the “drooling toothpaste” . . . veeeeery clever. We know what Naruto was imagining, and Sasuke turns and sees that . . . and that probably triggers his imagination! Nice.
Hee hee, “dobe box.” ^^
“Besides insulting me, is there a point to this?” I like that line. That’s a great way to say “Get to the point.” . . . “Bind him closer to Sasuke . . .” Interesting. So, Sasuke, you’ve switched from breaking the bond to tightening the bond. Well, you’re probably right on this. But do you know just how right you are? >:D
Wuh-oh! Naruto, you’re so hilarious. You know that could ruin a mood for this sort of thing? Or give your partner second thoughts?
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December 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 17: Ooh boy, smut! Goody! (*rubs hands gleefully*) :D
HA HA HA!! “Those are my boxers!” XDDDDD And I love the whole dialogue following that. ^^ Mm, great line: “Perhaps Sasuke didn’t realize the power of just touching someone.” Very wise. And good paragraph.
Great visualization for the initial massage.
NOTE: “Those wonderful hands [. . .] and drug themselves back down” . . . I don’t think there’s a past tense for “drag” written like “drug.” I think it’s just “dragged.”
I like how it’s just play . . . STOP. Pause. Continue play . . . STOP. Pause. Continue play . .--Oh, wait. Never mind, I spoke too soon. ^^ I love what Naruto said: “Oh, so I can . . .” Sasuke: “WHAT!?” XDDDDDD Great sudden change.
I like the symbolism/reality in “But with the addition of that word, he had . . .” Yeah. (I’m trying to actually avoid writing anything, uhm (*cough*cough*) in the reviews; I’m leaving it for the story.)
Oh boy, and there comes the final ground rule, the big one I was wondering about since yesterday (for you forewarned us that smut was to come).
Yessss, the pet name.
“He had to admit to himself, quietly since he treasured his life, that the sight of . . .” Pleases me too, Naruto! XD (Sorry, (*cough*cough*).)
Lol, “Icha, Icha.” “Come again?” “No. Come, Come.” XD And I like the last couple paragraphs of that segment before the break.
Awww, Naruto has to sleep on the floor? Man, that’s no fair. :(
HA HA HA!! “Those are my boxers!” XDDDDD And I love the whole dialogue following that. ^^ Mm, great line: “Perhaps Sasuke didn’t realize the power of just touching someone.” Very wise. And good paragraph.
Great visualization for the initial massage.
NOTE: “Those wonderful hands [. . .] and drug themselves back down” . . . I don’t think there’s a past tense for “drag” written like “drug.” I think it’s just “dragged.”
I like how it’s just play . . . STOP. Pause. Continue play . . . STOP. Pause. Continue play . .--Oh, wait. Never mind, I spoke too soon. ^^ I love what Naruto said: “Oh, so I can . . .” Sasuke: “WHAT!?” XDDDDDD Great sudden change.
I like the symbolism/reality in “But with the addition of that word, he had . . .” Yeah. (I’m trying to actually avoid writing anything, uhm (*cough*cough*) in the reviews; I’m leaving it for the story.)
Oh boy, and there comes the final ground rule, the big one I was wondering about since yesterday (for you forewarned us that smut was to come).
Yessss, the pet name.
“He had to admit to himself, quietly since he treasured his life, that the sight of . . .” Pleases me too, Naruto! XD (Sorry, (*cough*cough*).)
Lol, “Icha, Icha.” “Come again?” “No. Come, Come.” XD And I like the last couple paragraphs of that segment before the break.
Awww, Naruto has to sleep on the floor? Man, that’s no fair. :(
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December 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 18: Rape? Who is involved? That can’t be good. . . .
(*shiver*) All this talk about his sensei is making me nervous.
I like the fox’s new look. I’d like to see that drawn sometime.
Orochimaru: It’s called “karma,” dude. I might be right in thinking that you’ve got a lot of bad karma coming your way.
. . . Well, I’m glad he’s enjoying it a little--I'm not a total sadist. Oh, just a note: This is the first time I ever read a sex-scene in which one of the players is not Naruto, Sasuke, Sakura or the Kyuubi. Normally, I can’t stand the visualization of anyone else (though I have put ideas away to future references).
I was going to ask how does Naruto feel to know there’s rape in his mind, but never mind. I like the idea of the effect but not the knowledge.
WHOA, awesome last thought of the chapter! I never thought of that! I swear, YOU ARE DAMN GOOD AT THIS!!!
(*shiver*) All this talk about his sensei is making me nervous.
I like the fox’s new look. I’d like to see that drawn sometime.
Orochimaru: It’s called “karma,” dude. I might be right in thinking that you’ve got a lot of bad karma coming your way.
. . . Well, I’m glad he’s enjoying it a little--I'm not a total sadist. Oh, just a note: This is the first time I ever read a sex-scene in which one of the players is not Naruto, Sasuke, Sakura or the Kyuubi. Normally, I can’t stand the visualization of anyone else (though I have put ideas away to future references).
I was going to ask how does Naruto feel to know there’s rape in his mind, but never mind. I like the idea of the effect but not the knowledge.
WHOA, awesome last thought of the chapter! I never thought of that! I swear, YOU ARE DAMN GOOD AT THIS!!!
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December 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 19: Crap, they can’t relax yet, can they? I like the ending line of that first segment.
(!!) Naruto look out, don’t eat that yet!--Shit.
Heh, knew that was coming once the scroll worked.--Oh, clever! “The same void that sucked socks into it from the dryer.” XDD Oh man, and the paragraph only gets funnier from there! XDDD
I like Sasuke’s thoughts, too. X)
Oh man, another gross moment. I hope they don’t get much worse than this. Normally I don’t like these, but I swear, you have a gift to make almost anything good to read.
Jeez, another hilarious ending. XD Wow, that chapter was short. o__o
(!!) Naruto look out, don’t eat that yet!--Shit.
Heh, knew that was coming once the scroll worked.--Oh, clever! “The same void that sucked socks into it from the dryer.” XDD Oh man, and the paragraph only gets funnier from there! XDDD
I like Sasuke’s thoughts, too. X)
Oh man, another gross moment. I hope they don’t get much worse than this. Normally I don’t like these, but I swear, you have a gift to make almost anything good to read.
Jeez, another hilarious ending. XD Wow, that chapter was short. o__o