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January 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
well, i have been reading your story for quite some time (all in one go. hooray for christmas break!) and i was really stoked when the NarutoxSasuke smut started. your an exceptional (spelled incorrectly, i think) writer, and i assumed the sex would be equally as satisfying.
i was not dissappointed.
orochimaru/kyuubi was, in fact, quite unexpected, and i think the only consensus i have is this:
FUCKING GOOD SHIT DUDE. i'm totally stoked on this story. good job!
i was not dissappointed.
orochimaru/kyuubi was, in fact, quite unexpected, and i think the only consensus i have is this:
FUCKING GOOD SHIT DUDE. i'm totally stoked on this story. good job!
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January 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
What an awesome way to kick off the new year! Great sex scene: I love that you didn't just go all the way, instead really writing their inexperience into it. Plus, that leaves so much more to explore in later lemons!
Thanks for writing this story, I'm really enjoying it.
Thanks for writing this story, I'm really enjoying it.
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January 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hell yeah!! this chapter gets a ten out of ten from me. I loved it!! i esp loved the fact that nar used clones (which has been done before) but then had them change into other people (which was a stroke of fucking genius). I really loved that whole purty around my cock parting shot from nar to sasu. I can't wait to read the rest of your fic.
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January 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love you. Let me have your babies. NOW.
(Sorry, I know that your fic decerves a much longer and more detailed review, but after the last chapter, my brain has been turned into mush, and therefore I can't do better than this. Will try again later, ok? ^^'';)
(Sorry, I know that your fic decerves a much longer and more detailed review, but after the last chapter, my brain has been turned into mush, and therefore I can't do better than this. Will try again later, ok? ^^'';)
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January 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
KYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!
You officially = awesome!
*slaps personal stamp of approval on Zrina's forehead* Don't worry, it'll wash off...eventually.
Maybe.
OKAY! What I like-Ed best - here we go! This bit:
Surely kissing can't be too bad. Another roll of the hips above him brought out another embarrassing sound as he thrust up to meet them. Grinding was really good. And Naruto liked kissing while grinding. His hormone-clogged, genius mind tried to wrap itself around the situation as their hips thrust and rolled again. The goo was back with a vengeance.
Grinding was good. Kissing happened while grinding. Therefore kissing must be good, too. Satisfied with his half-baked attempt at logic, Sasuke used the handfuls of hair to drag Naruto's lips to his own.
This was so very wittily conveyed. Anyone in a uhmmm...similiar situation realizes how brainy melty it can be. Oddly enough, we human beings still end up trying to think at these points. Makes for a very humorous and engaging interplay.
I LOVED the fact that Naruto caled SasUke "baby" and the little emo-prince reacted so fiestily. Hmmm...yes, it's true "fiestily" might not be a word - but I think you understanding and appreciate my wordsmithing.
and this bit:
A passing servant paused in the hallway as the sound of what could only be described as a small scale war emanated from behind a closed door. Normally the servant would have gotten a ninja immediately, but intermittently spersed throughout the battle were cries of "Pervert!" as well as "Deviant!" and "Freak!" And of course there was the howling of laughter interrupted by an occasional "Ow!" or "Bastard!"
Hilarious! I love how once again you capture the essence of these two. Right up there with the decorative peeing in the snow escapade for me.
You please me so greatly! This is excellent and the rate at which you are cranking this out! Amazink!
Once again, excellent job!
*nibbles YOU*
You officially = awesome!
*slaps personal stamp of approval on Zrina's forehead* Don't worry, it'll wash off...eventually.
Maybe.
OKAY! What I like-Ed best - here we go! This bit:
Surely kissing can't be too bad. Another roll of the hips above him brought out another embarrassing sound as he thrust up to meet them. Grinding was really good. And Naruto liked kissing while grinding. His hormone-clogged, genius mind tried to wrap itself around the situation as their hips thrust and rolled again. The goo was back with a vengeance.
Grinding was good. Kissing happened while grinding. Therefore kissing must be good, too. Satisfied with his half-baked attempt at logic, Sasuke used the handfuls of hair to drag Naruto's lips to his own.
This was so very wittily conveyed. Anyone in a uhmmm...similiar situation realizes how brainy melty it can be. Oddly enough, we human beings still end up trying to think at these points. Makes for a very humorous and engaging interplay.
I LOVED the fact that Naruto caled SasUke "baby" and the little emo-prince reacted so fiestily. Hmmm...yes, it's true "fiestily" might not be a word - but I think you understanding and appreciate my wordsmithing.
and this bit:
A passing servant paused in the hallway as the sound of what could only be described as a small scale war emanated from behind a closed door. Normally the servant would have gotten a ninja immediately, but intermittently spersed throughout the battle were cries of "Pervert!" as well as "Deviant!" and "Freak!" And of course there was the howling of laughter interrupted by an occasional "Ow!" or "Bastard!"
Hilarious! I love how once again you capture the essence of these two. Right up there with the decorative peeing in the snow escapade for me.
You please me so greatly! This is excellent and the rate at which you are cranking this out! Amazink!
Once again, excellent job!
*nibbles YOU*
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January 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
omfrikin'gawd.......I LOVED it! The ending was perfect, LOL!! I hope they get to do more though, and realize feelings, though, too. It was great, and I really luff this story. The whole idea of it is great, and really unique as far as I know.........and I've read toooooons!!!
Thank you for updating on NewYears!! ^_^
-me
Thank you for updating on NewYears!! ^_^
-me
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January 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
O.o, Smexy and hilarious........
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Cool!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I can't wait for the next chapter! -Prays to unknown Gods for new chapters quickly, even though shishio is athiest-
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Cool!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I can't wait for the next chapter! -Prays to unknown Gods for new chapters quickly, even though shishio is athiest-
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January 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
XD Hehehe, extremely well written and a helluva plot to boot. Keep it up!
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January 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
omg this was pretty! i smiled all the time while reading this chapter. i absolutely love your creation of sasuke, too. please, keepup the good work and update quickly! :) you got me really hooked up!
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January 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*le gasp*
Well, I wasn't expecting that for smut ^^ It well went over my expectations: you did great! Especially how you really got Naruto's teasing across and Sasuke's inexperience coupled with his need. Awww, Sasuke... 8D And the clone part made me laugh; trust Naruto! hehe.
Keep up the good work! Looking forward to the next chapter!
Well, I wasn't expecting that for smut ^^ It well went over my expectations: you did great! Especially how you really got Naruto's teasing across and Sasuke's inexperience coupled with his need. Awww, Sasuke... 8D And the clone part made me laugh; trust Naruto! hehe.
Keep up the good work! Looking forward to the next chapter!