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March 26, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This story kicks major ass! Wish I could carry an idea for even a tenth of this long! lol, epic fail for me XD
Definitely gonna be re-reading this more than a few times \o/ ^_^
Definitely gonna be re-reading this more than a few times \o/ ^_^
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March 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Z I see you're here tonight:) I miss you a________________lot! Just wanted to say hey ^_^
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January 2, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Okay so I had promised myself that I would only review after I was finished this story completely (which has been difficult, let me tell you. You write amazingly and I've found myself quickly hooked to your story. Only 13 chapters left! =O I'm almost tempted to slow down the read just so I can draw the end out but I'm too excited to see how it ends)
All that aside, I decided to comment because there is one moment that just kind of made my life. Chapter 60, all the ninjas around the fire. Lee, finally realizing what they're all talking about and :
" Lee’s eyes stayed glassed over in shock for a moment longer before he suddenly sprang to his feet. “Yosh! They are expressing their trust and camaraderie in the most passionate way possible by opening not only their minds and hearts but their bodies as well! I have such respect for their youthful vigor and unquenchable spirit of friendship!” "
That... is amazing. The way you write him is perfect. Absolutely perfect. Sai is hilarious, Kyuubi is intriguing (KyuOro! Who would have thunk it O.O) and the relationship between Sasuke and Naruto is so in character. Beyond that, I like that it is progressive. In the beginning, it was (sort of) purely physical or rather they wanted to believe that it was simply physical. But I like that there was no grand moment where it changed. No speeches about how their love had blossomed etc etc. It was progressive and it just kind of... unfolded itself. Overall, lovely story and I shall be reviewing again once I hit 73. (nuuuuuu!)
All that aside, I decided to comment because there is one moment that just kind of made my life. Chapter 60, all the ninjas around the fire. Lee, finally realizing what they're all talking about and :
" Lee’s eyes stayed glassed over in shock for a moment longer before he suddenly sprang to his feet. “Yosh! They are expressing their trust and camaraderie in the most passionate way possible by opening not only their minds and hearts but their bodies as well! I have such respect for their youthful vigor and unquenchable spirit of friendship!” "
That... is amazing. The way you write him is perfect. Absolutely perfect. Sai is hilarious, Kyuubi is intriguing (KyuOro! Who would have thunk it O.O) and the relationship between Sasuke and Naruto is so in character. Beyond that, I like that it is progressive. In the beginning, it was (sort of) purely physical or rather they wanted to believe that it was simply physical. But I like that there was no grand moment where it changed. No speeches about how their love had blossomed etc etc. It was progressive and it just kind of... unfolded itself. Overall, lovely story and I shall be reviewing again once I hit 73. (nuuuuuu!)
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December 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
i pray you are able to post the next part of this tale soon as i find it very hot
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December 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hey ^^
Oh my god this fic is a fuckin' monster *smiles* I have not counted how many hours it took me to read it but it definitely where several.
The bad thing about it is... I just started reading yesterday *g*
So it was your writings fault that I stayed up very very very late yesterday and barley managed it to university today.
Well... for that I thank you ;)
I've stumbled upon the Naruto Fandom only recently and though it's fics certainly do not lack in number but, as my impression at least is, in quality.
Your work is realy one of those rare pearls that keep an ero-slash-reader happy ;)
Now I wish I could give you a very detailed and precise account of what I liked in this story and what not but unfortunately I'm no native english speaker and I'm already struggling with the words and probably by thus already making a fool out of myself *grins*
Still... I'm going to try ('cause for long fics readers should be rewarded with as long reviews as possible ;) )
What I liked:
- The plot: It was unique, had many interesting twists and was thouroughly planned (for keeping so far ahead with your writing I completely admire you...)
- The character-developement: You kept it slow. 16 Chapters (if I remember right) until the first lemon and still so very far away from anything like a loveconfession. That is so much more convincing than this head over heels moments you so often get to read(with Naruto I could at least somehow see them happening... but Sasuke just like that in the flash of a moment realising his undying love for the other? Hn...)
- The humor: You really head me laughing a few times! Especially Sai was great ^^
- Your ocs: With them you did a great deal I think! Writing ocs is very hard I think, cause it's so easy to get attached to your own creation and want them to shine, to make them stand out, just to be everything there is... and get them so very boring and annoying by doing so. You are really capable of avoiding this trap. Thanks for that ^^
What I didn't like:
- In some moments Kakashi: I don't know, this point might be a quite subjective one 'cause I really like Kakashi and view him as a very kind and forgiving person... at some points in your story he just seemed a little too cold to me (like the time he straightforward offerd to bring Naruto and Sasuke back and got in the fight with Iruka) But as I've said that might me just my personal taste ^^
- hm.. well.. there isn't much left... oo.. well... there are some minor things in the storyline but actually I don't think that's something a reader should critisise on, as long as the story stays believable and the characters act in such a way. Everything that goes beyond that is personal taste and definitely not a mistake by the author.
So... I'm not going to mention this points and come to an end with this demonstration of my unfortunately laking english-skills.
Thank you so so so much for writing this, it gave me a really good time ^^
Now I'm going to check out some of your other creations ;)
Keep the good work up ^^
Bye
Lycian
Oh my god this fic is a fuckin' monster *smiles* I have not counted how many hours it took me to read it but it definitely where several.
The bad thing about it is... I just started reading yesterday *g*
So it was your writings fault that I stayed up very very very late yesterday and barley managed it to university today.
Well... for that I thank you ;)
I've stumbled upon the Naruto Fandom only recently and though it's fics certainly do not lack in number but, as my impression at least is, in quality.
Your work is realy one of those rare pearls that keep an ero-slash-reader happy ;)
Now I wish I could give you a very detailed and precise account of what I liked in this story and what not but unfortunately I'm no native english speaker and I'm already struggling with the words and probably by thus already making a fool out of myself *grins*
Still... I'm going to try ('cause for long fics readers should be rewarded with as long reviews as possible ;) )
What I liked:
- The plot: It was unique, had many interesting twists and was thouroughly planned (for keeping so far ahead with your writing I completely admire you...)
- The character-developement: You kept it slow. 16 Chapters (if I remember right) until the first lemon and still so very far away from anything like a loveconfession. That is so much more convincing than this head over heels moments you so often get to read(with Naruto I could at least somehow see them happening... but Sasuke just like that in the flash of a moment realising his undying love for the other? Hn...)
- The humor: You really head me laughing a few times! Especially Sai was great ^^
- Your ocs: With them you did a great deal I think! Writing ocs is very hard I think, cause it's so easy to get attached to your own creation and want them to shine, to make them stand out, just to be everything there is... and get them so very boring and annoying by doing so. You are really capable of avoiding this trap. Thanks for that ^^
What I didn't like:
- In some moments Kakashi: I don't know, this point might be a quite subjective one 'cause I really like Kakashi and view him as a very kind and forgiving person... at some points in your story he just seemed a little too cold to me (like the time he straightforward offerd to bring Naruto and Sasuke back and got in the fight with Iruka) But as I've said that might me just my personal taste ^^
- hm.. well.. there isn't much left... oo.. well... there are some minor things in the storyline but actually I don't think that's something a reader should critisise on, as long as the story stays believable and the characters act in such a way. Everything that goes beyond that is personal taste and definitely not a mistake by the author.
So... I'm not going to mention this points and come to an end with this demonstration of my unfortunately laking english-skills.
Thank you so so so much for writing this, it gave me a really good time ^^
Now I'm going to check out some of your other creations ;)
Keep the good work up ^^
Bye
Lycian
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November 5, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Heroic! That was one of the best in ninjaverse fics I've ever read! Consider yourself added to my watch list. Oh and are you planning on posting this or the sequel on Y!gal? That's where I and 99% of the time. I was sent to AFF from there by a fan of this fic. She really admires your works and I can see why.
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November 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
i don't get the end......can somebody explain it to me?
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July 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I'm SO sorry that I waited this long to review, but I'm one of these people who just has to read until there is no more to read before I can make myself review. Again, sorry.
Now that my little guilt-trip is out of the way, I have to say that I've NEVER enjoyed a Naruto fanfic so much before. You kept everyone so in character while still creating the relationships between them that you'd never find in cannon and that takes real understanding of the characters themselves. I stand in awe of that ability alone and then the skill with which you write just takes my awe to a whole new level. The plot that you've developed is very enjoyable and the plot-twists are equally so, not to mention unique. I love how you've squashed Sasuke's usual 'so-emo-he-just-makes-you-want-to-stab-him-in-the-kidney' additude somehow without making him lose that special something that makes him Sasuke--because quite frankly, I'm THIS close to making an attempt from some of his actions in the manga. That said, I'm looking forward to the sequel, as well as any other NaruSasu tidbits that you might have floating around out there.
Now that my little guilt-trip is out of the way, I have to say that I've NEVER enjoyed a Naruto fanfic so much before. You kept everyone so in character while still creating the relationships between them that you'd never find in cannon and that takes real understanding of the characters themselves. I stand in awe of that ability alone and then the skill with which you write just takes my awe to a whole new level. The plot that you've developed is very enjoyable and the plot-twists are equally so, not to mention unique. I love how you've squashed Sasuke's usual 'so-emo-he-just-makes-you-want-to-stab-him-in-the-kidney' additude somehow without making him lose that special something that makes him Sasuke--because quite frankly, I'm THIS close to making an attempt from some of his actions in the manga. That said, I'm looking forward to the sequel, as well as any other NaruSasu tidbits that you might have floating around out there.
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June 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I don't understand why you insist on putting Japanese words in an English story. There are words I don't understand. Do you assume that every one of your readers know Japanese? If so, you shouldn't be writing in English to begin with. Would have saved me the annoyance of trying to understand what the hell the meaning of the words is.
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June 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
OMG!!! I loved this story I can say it in four different languages, but I won't it's just wow it was so cool and exciting and suspensful and dramatic, it had romance and if I could make up a word for how awesome the story was I would but since I can't I'll say it was vicious. And that chapter I think it was 48 I loved how you did the fight scenes with the lights going on and off so vicious your characters were great sai was just as annoying as he is in the show hated it and loved it. The eye changing the Orochimaru and little Hiroki so cute you rocked that story it made my whole months when I read it it took me a couple of months to read it I wanted to take it all in if I was a book publisher I'd pay you to put that on the market that is how much I loved it. Woo can't wait for sequel and I'm all sad now that the sound of dreams is over for me you know I felt like I was right there through the whole journey, this is a splee moment so SPLEEE!