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July 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 40:
i don't think i really like the "good" sound ninja's...they rub me the wrong way. i am not sure why...maybe i feel for sasuke. like yeah it's good for them to learn to fight as a team, but i think those people act almost like they own them even though they don't. i would have high tailed it out of there. i think sasuke would too...oh well the things he does for his dobe, ne?
i don't think i really like the "good" sound ninja's...they rub me the wrong way. i am not sure why...maybe i feel for sasuke. like yeah it's good for them to learn to fight as a team, but i think those people act almost like they own them even though they don't. i would have high tailed it out of there. i think sasuke would too...oh well the things he does for his dobe, ne?
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July 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
chapter 42:
that little boy is cute. I like him. I also so still love Sai...i think as long as i am not the one dealing with him. i think i might try to kill him...only to have him kick my as because he is a ruthless shinobi and i am only a normal person. either that or he would be confused as to what i was trying to do and thus shred my ego to bits....obliviously as is his way.
that little boy is cute. I like him. I also so still love Sai...i think as long as i am not the one dealing with him. i think i might try to kill him...only to have him kick my as because he is a ruthless shinobi and i am only a normal person. either that or he would be confused as to what i was trying to do and thus shred my ego to bits....obliviously as is his way.
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July 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
32: The anticipation is killing me, i kind of just want to run off and read more. So hot! I wonder who this new ninja is...or maybe it's a ninja already mentioned.
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July 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 33:
I so want to see post coital sasuke, he sounds really adorable. I still think it’s weird that naruto lost it to himself….I mean…Well I wonder how many other young ninja’s did the same, and at least those had some others with them so their was a possibility of messing around with someone other then a perverted old man. Who better then yourself, and anyone else you ever wanted.
I so want to see post coital sasuke, he sounds really adorable. I still think it’s weird that naruto lost it to himself….I mean…Well I wonder how many other young ninja’s did the same, and at least those had some others with them so their was a possibility of messing around with someone other then a perverted old man. Who better then yourself, and anyone else you ever wanted.
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July 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
chapter 34:
i wonder if they are going to move agian?
i wonder if they are going to move agian?
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July 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I really like your story so far and can't wait for the next chapter!
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July 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
YAY! I hope i can finally review this site was being an ass much, telling me i could only review once a day, that never happened to me before either way i love this story. i hope the hotel woman doesn't walk into to hear them moaning or anything, thinking they are brother and sister. EW! i liked the chapter a while back when Naruto finally gets some from Sasuke. Then Sasuke is jealous about who naruto learned with...and he was like clones....that looked like SASUKE! I couldn't stop laugh...especially with his purty mouth...LMAO. I think Sasuke stoped his sweet dreams because he now has naruto with him. Call me evil but i don't feel sorry for orochimaru....i really don't want him getting free. Why can't Kyuubi just see him trying to escape get him and kill him. I also like the idea where the fox is being affected by Naruto like Naruto is being affected by the fox.
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July 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ah shino’s pay back…you think im ugly well then you can be my bugs food. And Kiba being jealous of Akamaru LMAO…I love sai how can you not, to insult everyone with such a straight face,
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July 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 4:
Ah. I really loved the part where he was remembering the feel of naruto's body, and how blue his eyes still are. I wonder what they are going to do in the next chapter. Sasuke just want's to kill his brother and he wants power. i don't know about Sasuke being okay with Orochimaru killing Itachi, i mean he wouldn't really be the one doing it, just his body. too me that would be like "hey he's over there now you can kill him for me." or maybe he messed up and doesn't want to be wrong.
Ah. I really loved the part where he was remembering the feel of naruto's body, and how blue his eyes still are. I wonder what they are going to do in the next chapter. Sasuke just want's to kill his brother and he wants power. i don't know about Sasuke being okay with Orochimaru killing Itachi, i mean he wouldn't really be the one doing it, just his body. too me that would be like "hey he's over there now you can kill him for me." or maybe he messed up and doesn't want to be wrong.
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July 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh! That was a cruel way to end the chapter! Of course, it was brilliantly suspensful, too.
I enjoyed chapters 61 and 62. You write action very well. You add enough discreption to create sufficient imagery, but you don't bore the reader with details about the gleam, heighth, weight, and texture of Sasuke's sword. Woah, that sounded kind of dirty.
Anyway, I must admit that the first time I read chapter 61, I missed quite a bit. I was in a bit of a hurry to reach the end in hopes of finding a cuddly SasuxNaru ending. However, I'm glad you didn't skimp on the fights, despite my need for some actual yaoi loving. I look forward to the resolution you are working towards. Oh, and you made Kakashi very cool. :)
I enjoyed chapters 61 and 62. You write action very well. You add enough discreption to create sufficient imagery, but you don't bore the reader with details about the gleam, heighth, weight, and texture of Sasuke's sword. Woah, that sounded kind of dirty.
Anyway, I must admit that the first time I read chapter 61, I missed quite a bit. I was in a bit of a hurry to reach the end in hopes of finding a cuddly SasuxNaru ending. However, I'm glad you didn't skimp on the fights, despite my need for some actual yaoi loving. I look forward to the resolution you are working towards. Oh, and you made Kakashi very cool. :)