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June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh, wow! It took me three days, but I have just finished your story. I'm very glad that I went ahead and read. Previously, I had bookmarked your story, but I was waiting to read it until it was completed. However, I gave into peer pressure and read it anyway. I had hear that it was an amazing read, and I'm glad that I went ahead and caught up with it. Of course, now I'm stuck biting my nails, waiting to find out what happens next...
I love how fluid your storytelling is. You also do a fabulous job keeping the boys in character. I am especially fond of your portrayel of Sai. It was a stroke of genius to use a heterosexual male to keep the characters from becoming too OOC.
I'm also impressed by your origional characters. You have given them so much depth, that they could easily exist within the actual Naruto series. Hiroki is perfect and a welcome edition to the little family. I love stories where Naruto and Sasuke have kids, but the children tend to fall flat, and the story usually crumbles at that point. Good job on avoiding that.
Chapter 60 was amazing. It's such a dark point in the tale, but the humor was appropriate, and it left me without wanting to bash my head into the computer from an overload of angst. If this wasn't such a well-written and intriguing story, I'd be regretting having read this, since you left us with a horrible cliffhanger. Grr... It looks like it'll take several chapters for the current conflict to be resolved, too!
Thanks for sharing your story.
I love how fluid your storytelling is. You also do a fabulous job keeping the boys in character. I am especially fond of your portrayel of Sai. It was a stroke of genius to use a heterosexual male to keep the characters from becoming too OOC.
I'm also impressed by your origional characters. You have given them so much depth, that they could easily exist within the actual Naruto series. Hiroki is perfect and a welcome edition to the little family. I love stories where Naruto and Sasuke have kids, but the children tend to fall flat, and the story usually crumbles at that point. Good job on avoiding that.
Chapter 60 was amazing. It's such a dark point in the tale, but the humor was appropriate, and it left me without wanting to bash my head into the computer from an overload of angst. If this wasn't such a well-written and intriguing story, I'd be regretting having read this, since you left us with a horrible cliffhanger. Grr... It looks like it'll take several chapters for the current conflict to be resolved, too!
Thanks for sharing your story.
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June 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
yah! Konoha gang is finally back. Sai is so funny. This dude loves to stir it up! Is the picture Sai drew anything like the manga where Sai drew himself with Sasuke? I can't wait for the showdown.
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June 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i absolutely enjoyed the fun at the end of chapters 60. it rocked. i love reading this story, and it's almost time for another re-read. keep up the good work!
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June 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ahh! ^_^ Comic relief! lol Gawd I'm so excited for the next chapter but thinking about this story ending is making me depressed...I luff it too much!! XD
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June 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
“Having anal intercourse.”
My God I about died. Yet that is so like him.
Cam't wait till the next chapter.
My God I about died. Yet that is so like him.
Cam't wait till the next chapter.
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June 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Another awesome chapter. I love this story!! How long until Sasuke and Naruto get to see each other again. Poor things :(
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June 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh my goodness, when they started to name all the ways to say sex I started to laugh out loud. I think this chappie was hilarious and now that everyone besides Sakura knows what is going on, I think things will go smoothly.
ja ne till next time and keep up the good work
ja ne till next time and keep up the good work
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June 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
AH! I missed all the Konoha nin! You write everyone in a way that makes them so real; I love it! That dialogue at the end was amazing. And I'm still in awe that you managed to create such a cast of OC's without Marysuing left and right. You make my life better. ;) I can't wait for more!
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June 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like what this story has become, the eye switching was an interesting idea, and the last part of chap 6o had me laughing...snogging lol. Keep it up i can't wait for the next chapter!
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June 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful as always! I love these two chapters so much!!!! The way you write Sasuke makes his change evident yet still in character! You have a way of capturing everyone character very well! I love your Sai ^^ he is just to rude and funny!!! Did he draw that picture of his out of his imagination or did he see? Hehehehe TenTen as a fangirl awsome! Mission rescue Naruto has begun!!! (ok so they are rescuing the doctor's son first but still) I can't wait to read more!