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they left survivors at the 2nd lair they broke out of_the one where Sasuke was arrested as a criminal while in the hospital recovering. Why would he not realize that they would send messages to the other lairs to warn them-after spending 3 years within that system he knew how they operated and what they would have done in that instance. Yet he went to another lair after that--he was lucky that naruto's demon cleansed the poison from his system and that Sasuke himself wasn't poisoned.

(((Sai stepped closer to the girl, making the conversation appear more intimate than it was. Naruto glanced up at him in surprise then seemed to realize what he was doing and relaxed )))___So, Naruto recognizes and knows how to change his behaviors so not be attract suspicion (like when on missions or when trying to hide from the people hunting him); but Sai recognized both Sasuke and Naruto because they still walked around like ninja instead of civilians and Naruto continued to use his male body language while in a female body_I thought Sasuke was supposed to be a genius. Walking around in a civilian village like a ninja and going to lairs after warnings would have been sent out.

You are SO much more than a drama queen_at times it almost becomes a parody of itself because it's just so over the top. When Orochimaru's soul was destroyed why wasn't Sasuke's curse seal and it's attributes gone. Since Orochimau had no more presence in the world (body or soul) shouldn't his Jutsu's (curse marks) disappear_because they no longer have the evil chakra's presence to influence/feed/maintain them. This has been a fascinating story and very entertaining. You are a very good story teller. You have a habit of being OVERLY dramatic at times_so much so that it tends to be more distracting than cause me to feel empathy or whatever emotion you're trying to evoke from your readers. IE: you had Naruto so overwhelmed by his emotions/traums/drama/etc; that you having him chase his tails didn't come across as funny as much as it did just seem out of place. I was especially pleased with your Sasuke character. The progression of his personnna, image, changing, growth, new awareness, etc. of the character was fascinating. Thanks for sharing the story. Well done.

This was a joyous chapter. Nothing too large or dramatic/traumatic happening__but it was a simple look into a moment of time these 3 shared as a family--and it was perfect. I also liked the 'dysfunctional' barb Naruto traded with Sasuke_very well done.

i just finished reading this wonderfull story!! and i`ll read the sequel. i just wanted to say. that this story was great... i love the plot, the way the characters were developed. but the thing that attracte me the most was that you at least cpuld stay them into character. and not just some cheap soap apora, you know?

my congrats to you.. and for the sequel

yei!!!

thanks for creating this little universe of naruto.

What an excellent, well thought out story. I couldn't stop reading! Can't wait for the sequel.

I reread this story every day! Zrina, will you be continuing with this story or have you lost your muse? Even if you decide to butcher it, anything is better than nuffink, sniff sniff sniff!

I already left a tome on my other review on your livejournal and here I am stalking you into aff lol.

I'm finding it a bit hard to relate to the manga as I think I might be obsessed with your version of events. You scared me so many times - when Orochimaru posessed Naruto, when Naruto and Sasuke consumated their relationship he he he, when Orochimaru came back when he got the sharingan etc etc etc...it felt like you were going a whole other direction but heck you reined everything in and I'm just a puddle lol.

You know it's interesting, there is so much that you have intuitively touched on - long before it reared in the manga and who knows I fought against liking your fic but heck kicking and screaming you dragged me in and now I reread it every day!

I really hope you update, pretty please it's heartbreaking to leave this incomplete!!! :) Hope you're well btw :)

Wow... You are a fantastic writer. I can't wait to read more of your work. The way you wrote the charecters was increadibly believable to what would happen in the story... You should consider writing a original story and getting it published. Just from how this story was written i would read just about any book you would put out. Awsome job and can't wait to read the sequel.

HOLY HELLS.....I've finally finished....reaading.....once again!! O__O This has got to be my 5th time and I NEVER GOT SICK OF IT! Ya hear?! OMFG IT'S MY ABSOLUTE FAV OF ALL TIME IN THIS FANDOM! Now...I'm gonna run happily down the next corridor and read your sequel now. Can you tell how excited I am?! Can you? My body shall be sacrificed on your alter tonight...XD

Thank you so much for the wonderful memories. You are pure talent and don't ever let obstacles get in the way of your creativity. *worships*

Sequel?

Please?

Pretty-please?