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June 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ok 1st and foremost i started reading this fic like a week ago and i am now i hav caught up and the only thing i hav to say is damn this is a godd ass story. i mean chapter after chapter had me wanting to know more even when it turned ugly at times i had to know wat happnd next. man this story is just that good. i had to review, no i needed to review. wat else can i say. i mean wow. just wow. well i guess i will finish up by saying ur a great writer and i enjoyed reading this and cant wait to read more. so i guess thats it. XD well ok then. peace
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June 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
(Blushes as red as a tomato) I always have faith in you, that’s why I’m still reading your work. You truly are one of my three favorite authors (both officially published and unofficially published). I’m very sorry for my last review. To say it came off as a bit strong is probably an understatement. Like I said before though, take it as a complement that your writing is able to affect your readers so much. I suppose I was just very surprised in your choice to take Sasuke’s eyes from him. I sincerely hope you give them back.
Anyway though, in regards to this chapter, I enjoyed it immensely. You can really see the affect that Naruto has had on Sasuke in this chapter just in the way he handles Hiroki and treats him. Sasuke’s really matured throughout this story and I am very excited to see how much growth he continues to undergo by the end of the story.
I also thought it was very interesting that you gave us some insight into Itachi. Granted that I don’t read the manga so I don’t know how much is your fabrication, and how much is real, I thought that your explanation of why Itachi massacred his clan made the situation even more tragic. I’m curious though how this mysterious “objective” that he has to complete will play into the rest of the story. Just when I think you are finished adding in plot twists you create a few more. You do have a way with keeping us on the edge of our computer chairs. My best wishes for you and your writing.
Anyway though, in regards to this chapter, I enjoyed it immensely. You can really see the affect that Naruto has had on Sasuke in this chapter just in the way he handles Hiroki and treats him. Sasuke’s really matured throughout this story and I am very excited to see how much growth he continues to undergo by the end of the story.
I also thought it was very interesting that you gave us some insight into Itachi. Granted that I don’t read the manga so I don’t know how much is your fabrication, and how much is real, I thought that your explanation of why Itachi massacred his clan made the situation even more tragic. I’m curious though how this mysterious “objective” that he has to complete will play into the rest of the story. Just when I think you are finished adding in plot twists you create a few more. You do have a way with keeping us on the edge of our computer chairs. My best wishes for you and your writing.
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June 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
AHHH! LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE! This story is my lifeblood! Can't wait for more!
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June 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
still haven't logged in XD
Hey hon, it’s the weekly dose of Adi’s weird way of reviewing time XD
Ok, I wanted to emphasise again how well you’ve done Itachi, and I like the mentions of Deidara, and the torturing XD The Leader as an Uchiha theory was nicely pulled off, some people will completely miss that, but that’s because they’re 14 and not meant to be on the site anyway :) Itachi just got bored, it’s the most IC reason to explain why he left. That last line where it shows Itachi’s still a puppet to the Uchiha clan? I don’t know the word for it, but it’s a good word, uh, I’ll come back to that :D
I have to admit, I was surprised to see Hiroki go all hulk, I just didn’t expect it, I love your action scenes. Dammit, I’m gonna petition that you write the anime. Hiroki trying to Sasuke was the cutest thing ever, and his thoughts about protecting him were Narutoish, I almost expected the “Believe it” line again :D
“That’s what makes him an idiot, too.” I think I’ll name that my favourite line of the chapter, it’s just so damn true. And then Sasuke went all dad/older brother, it’s just the way he’d parent, Naruto would just stick his tongue out at Tsunade and Hiroki would probably copy XD
Hiroki clinging to Sasuke makes the cutest picture ever, I hope someone draws that, kinda reminds me of the flashbacks with Sasuke and Itachi, which were cute and a little sinister because Itachi went all psychopath.
We haven’t seen too much with Tsunade, I think this is the only one with almost a whole chapter of her in it and hon you rocked her out. Her conversation with Sasuke, around the recap parts were so funny, and ugh I need to stop using “IC” to describe everything you make your characters do, but it’s still very true. The recap, I HAVE TO GO READ THE EARLY CHAPTERS. IT WILL TAKE ME ALL WEEK, BUT I’LL DO IT FOR IT IS MY NINJA WAY. Hmm a chapter or 2 a day may be more sensible XD. Sasuke being so stubborn about saving Naruto, just tugs at the heart strings
KAKASHI! (your ears probably are bleeding at this point) His one-sided conversation with Akamaru was just freaking mastermind. You have nothing to worry about with your Kakashi not being taken well with the readers, it’s impossible not to love him when he had a convo with Akamaru. I like that even Kakashi was a bit caught out with Sasuke’s appearance, but still managed to take it in his stride, wouldn’t want to ruin his reputation XD . “I see you’ve been busy while you were away.” We have a contender for the favourite line :D Kakashi blinking at Sasuke’s blue eyes just, ah *loves on you*
SAKURA! (you might want to go to the doctors after this) you did an excellent job, you didn’t cave into your “die, pink wench die!!!” instincts. Haha, she felt jealous of Hiroki. Her thoughts immediately going to trying a relationship with Sasuke is characteristic (see I didn’t use ‘IC’ XD) and makes me go “pfft, girl you have no chance” oh and lol I like how Hiroki would have glued himself to Naruto anyway and Sasuke knew this XD
You always manage to find the perfect line ending that makes me go “I WANT MORE WOMAN!!!!” XD
And here ends Adi’s weekly review, tune in next time to see her reaction to Shikamaru.
*HUGS!*
LOVE YOU LIKE YOU WOULDN'T BELIEVE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Hey hon, it’s the weekly dose of Adi’s weird way of reviewing time XD
Ok, I wanted to emphasise again how well you’ve done Itachi, and I like the mentions of Deidara, and the torturing XD The Leader as an Uchiha theory was nicely pulled off, some people will completely miss that, but that’s because they’re 14 and not meant to be on the site anyway :) Itachi just got bored, it’s the most IC reason to explain why he left. That last line where it shows Itachi’s still a puppet to the Uchiha clan? I don’t know the word for it, but it’s a good word, uh, I’ll come back to that :D
I have to admit, I was surprised to see Hiroki go all hulk, I just didn’t expect it, I love your action scenes. Dammit, I’m gonna petition that you write the anime. Hiroki trying to Sasuke was the cutest thing ever, and his thoughts about protecting him were Narutoish, I almost expected the “Believe it” line again :D
“That’s what makes him an idiot, too.” I think I’ll name that my favourite line of the chapter, it’s just so damn true. And then Sasuke went all dad/older brother, it’s just the way he’d parent, Naruto would just stick his tongue out at Tsunade and Hiroki would probably copy XD
Hiroki clinging to Sasuke makes the cutest picture ever, I hope someone draws that, kinda reminds me of the flashbacks with Sasuke and Itachi, which were cute and a little sinister because Itachi went all psychopath.
We haven’t seen too much with Tsunade, I think this is the only one with almost a whole chapter of her in it and hon you rocked her out. Her conversation with Sasuke, around the recap parts were so funny, and ugh I need to stop using “IC” to describe everything you make your characters do, but it’s still very true. The recap, I HAVE TO GO READ THE EARLY CHAPTERS. IT WILL TAKE ME ALL WEEK, BUT I’LL DO IT FOR IT IS MY NINJA WAY. Hmm a chapter or 2 a day may be more sensible XD. Sasuke being so stubborn about saving Naruto, just tugs at the heart strings
KAKASHI! (your ears probably are bleeding at this point) His one-sided conversation with Akamaru was just freaking mastermind. You have nothing to worry about with your Kakashi not being taken well with the readers, it’s impossible not to love him when he had a convo with Akamaru. I like that even Kakashi was a bit caught out with Sasuke’s appearance, but still managed to take it in his stride, wouldn’t want to ruin his reputation XD . “I see you’ve been busy while you were away.” We have a contender for the favourite line :D Kakashi blinking at Sasuke’s blue eyes just, ah *loves on you*
SAKURA! (you might want to go to the doctors after this) you did an excellent job, you didn’t cave into your “die, pink wench die!!!” instincts. Haha, she felt jealous of Hiroki. Her thoughts immediately going to trying a relationship with Sasuke is characteristic (see I didn’t use ‘IC’ XD) and makes me go “pfft, girl you have no chance” oh and lol I like how Hiroki would have glued himself to Naruto anyway and Sasuke knew this XD
You always manage to find the perfect line ending that makes me go “I WANT MORE WOMAN!!!!” XD
And here ends Adi’s weekly review, tune in next time to see her reaction to Shikamaru.
*HUGS!*
LOVE YOU LIKE YOU WOULDN'T BELIEVE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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June 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OMG loved it, the kid is just to cute! when is everyone else going to find out about sasuke and naruto being more then just friends, i can't waite to see their faces!(or read about them...you all know what i mean)
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June 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh god I found myself groaning when it reached the end because there was no more to read :(
Anyway lol glad Tsunade didn't take Sasuke's head off that was a relief lol and Hiroki's reaction was brilliant I loved how Sasuke chided him lol making him happy by comparing him to Naruto and then calling him an idiot in the same breath heh :D and Kakashi's reaction looool that was soooo Kakashi :D anyway :s I hope they get to Naruto soon although I know it won't just happen over night but it has me worried :S stupid Orochimaru *glares*
Can't wait for the next update ^_^ thanks for the cool chp.
Hina xXxx
Anyway lol glad Tsunade didn't take Sasuke's head off that was a relief lol and Hiroki's reaction was brilliant I loved how Sasuke chided him lol making him happy by comparing him to Naruto and then calling him an idiot in the same breath heh :D and Kakashi's reaction looool that was soooo Kakashi :D anyway :s I hope they get to Naruto soon although I know it won't just happen over night but it has me worried :S stupid Orochimaru *glares*
Can't wait for the next update ^_^ thanks for the cool chp.
Hina xXxx
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June 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*hugs* I loved it to pieces. Sakura still hasn't figured out Naruto and Sasuke are a couple... that'll hurt I reckon, but she'll put it together eventually even if no-one tells her outright. :D I love your writing, and the way you... just damn I love your writing and the way it all comes together. I'm not sure about the whole other user of the big-evil sharigan I can't spell right now, but I'm happy to go along for the ride. I imagine you wouldn't be mentioning something like that if you didn't have your own plans for it. If this story has a sequal I htink your going to kill a whole lot of fangirls / boys.
Anyway. Awesome update. It made my day (not that that's surprising it was a shitty exam failing day). An excellent way to end my day.
As for you Anbu Training story, thanks for getting back to me on it. I'm sorry if I was being presumtious asking, but I just loved it htat much and can see so much potential for it. :D BUT I'm more than happy to sit back and twiddle my thumbs to see if you get back to it, and if you do happen to get back to it, what you do to it. :D Hope I'm making good sense. Can't wait for whatever it is you choose to post next. :D
*one of your fans* Kimra
Anyway. Awesome update. It made my day (not that that's surprising it was a shitty exam failing day). An excellent way to end my day.
As for you Anbu Training story, thanks for getting back to me on it. I'm sorry if I was being presumtious asking, but I just loved it htat much and can see so much potential for it. :D BUT I'm more than happy to sit back and twiddle my thumbs to see if you get back to it, and if you do happen to get back to it, what you do to it. :D Hope I'm making good sense. Can't wait for whatever it is you choose to post next. :D
*one of your fans* Kimra
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June 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wwo, another good chap. Kakashi and Sakura at once. It was about time though. I love Hiroki's reaction to everything. And the closeness between him and Sasuke is uber cute. Can't wait to see what happens next. Great job as usual.
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June 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Uh oh! Is Itachi and Deidara going to steal Orochimaru/Naruto before Sasuke and Kakashi can save Naruto? It's so cute the way that Sasuke and Hiroki are so attached to each other. I can't wait until Sakura finds out that Naruto and Sasuke are together. Great chapter! :)
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June 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Daww! Sasuke actually went easy on Sakura. That was really cute! Hiroki gets more and more adorable every chapter! I wonder how they'll find out about Naruto and Sasuke's romantic relationship, I'm half expecting Sai to randomly blurt it out. Heehee! That would be great. Good chapter, you really capture Tsunade. Companding, stubborn, yet caring. Her interaction with Sasuke was really great. Itachi is good too. I'm really impressed by how you are able to capture the character's personalities so accurately. Kudos!