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June 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
please update soon! this is an awesome story, I want to know what happens to Sasuke! this story is beautifully written, brilliant plot, nice twists, it never gets boring!
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June 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I liky. I liky a lot. I love how Sasuke accepted that the kid was his family now. I am also curious as hell as to what Hiroku's (sp?) power is. Nice transition chapter and I look forward to the next update. On to Blackmail and Betrayal!
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June 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
omg i loved it when hiroki said Believe it! i thought it was the cutest thing ever!! also sasuke having narutos eyes and naruto havin his kinda sucks but i its.... just... well, ITS SO DARLING! love the story cannot wait for the next chapter, keep up the awesome job!!!!
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June 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*sniff, sniff* This is getting a little angsty! But I love it! I love how Sasuke's goal of revenge is given up for rescuing Naruto!!! It hurts me to see them torn apart like this. So beautiful! I love Tsunade's reaction to seeing Sasuke though! That's how I pictured she would react. You leave me sitting on the edge of my seat as always! I can't wait to read more! Keep writing!
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June 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 57
I couldn’t get through chapter 57!!! I tried, but I just couldn’t get through it, until now. I would start to read it, and then I would get to the part where you revealed that Orochimaru took Sasuke’s eyes and I just couldn’t keep reading. The sharingan is just such an integral aspect of Sasuke that to make him go without it just makes Sasuke to seem lacking in some way, not to mention its what makes him an Uchiha…well that and his milky white skin and midnight hair, but that’s beside the point! And yes, I realize it’s more than a little ridiculous for me to be this upset over something that’s happened in a story, but I can’t help it! Take it as a complement that you are such a talented writer that you are able to develop a story and its characters to a point where your writing is able to affect your readers this much.
Chapter 58
I can’t say that I’m a fan of this chapter either. Not because the writing is awful or anything of that nature. No, I’m not a fan of the current state of the plot. I really have no idea where you are going with this story and I’m partially nervous about finding out how you plan to advance the plot. Have we even reached the climax yet, because I honestly can’t tell? On one hand I appreciate that you have kept the story interesting with the many plot turns and cliff hangers. However, on the other hand I love happy endings, and I’m not entirely confident that this story can end with any semblance of a happy ending without it feeling forced. However, you have proven yourself to be a master storyteller and as such I do plan to continue reading this story, I’m just a little concerned on how much I’ll continue to like the story. Enough of my ramblings though. I look forward to the next chapter because I do so hate cliff hangers, even if I may not be happy with the answer to the cliff hanger. My very best wishes for you and your writing.
I couldn’t get through chapter 57!!! I tried, but I just couldn’t get through it, until now. I would start to read it, and then I would get to the part where you revealed that Orochimaru took Sasuke’s eyes and I just couldn’t keep reading. The sharingan is just such an integral aspect of Sasuke that to make him go without it just makes Sasuke to seem lacking in some way, not to mention its what makes him an Uchiha…well that and his milky white skin and midnight hair, but that’s beside the point! And yes, I realize it’s more than a little ridiculous for me to be this upset over something that’s happened in a story, but I can’t help it! Take it as a complement that you are such a talented writer that you are able to develop a story and its characters to a point where your writing is able to affect your readers this much.
Chapter 58
I can’t say that I’m a fan of this chapter either. Not because the writing is awful or anything of that nature. No, I’m not a fan of the current state of the plot. I really have no idea where you are going with this story and I’m partially nervous about finding out how you plan to advance the plot. Have we even reached the climax yet, because I honestly can’t tell? On one hand I appreciate that you have kept the story interesting with the many plot turns and cliff hangers. However, on the other hand I love happy endings, and I’m not entirely confident that this story can end with any semblance of a happy ending without it feeling forced. However, you have proven yourself to be a master storyteller and as such I do plan to continue reading this story, I’m just a little concerned on how much I’ll continue to like the story. Enough of my ramblings though. I look forward to the next chapter because I do so hate cliff hangers, even if I may not be happy with the answer to the cliff hanger. My very best wishes for you and your writing.
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June 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ohhh, Zrina-sensei, I'm so excited! I can't wait to see what happens next, because I've really fallen in love with little Hiroki.
(I came in around Ch. 54, and it's so nice to find an incredibly well-written story that has an actual PLOT, delicious smex scenes, and is long enough for me to enjoy it for more than just a few chapters. I also like the AU stories that you're doing, which is saying a lot because I usually loathe AU.)
(I came in around Ch. 54, and it's so nice to find an incredibly well-written story that has an actual PLOT, delicious smex scenes, and is long enough for me to enjoy it for more than just a few chapters. I also like the AU stories that you're doing, which is saying a lot because I usually loathe AU.)
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June 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i'm crying right now that hug between sasuke and that kid so precious (sniff) and what he said (the kid) about hoping someone love him enough to trade eyes with him was just so (sobs) so good. i didn't mind the joke great like always. see ya!
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June 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yay!! Next chapter! Hoorrrayy! ^_^ um... nevermind, I'm always hyper when you update new parts of teh story.
Well then, go on! Do your best and write more with that great style of yours :)
Well then, go on! Do your best and write more with that great style of yours :)
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June 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh man. This just gets better and better. Thank you.
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June 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Uh oh! Looks like Hiroki is going to attack the Hokage!! I'm so glad that Sasuke found the others and the little boy is just so cute!!! I love how Sasuke has already bonded with him. :)