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February 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hey there, I was reading your story and found that you have amazing talent as an author. This is why I am taking some time to invite you over to my website Laefe E-Publishing. I’m looking for young talented authors who have it in them to make creative original works.
I know that you will automatically think that this might be a scam so to help ease your worries you can either check out my own profile on this site so you can see that I am the real deal, or you can add me to Windows Live Messenger that you can ask me any questions that may come to your mind.
Laefe is a new online epublishing and you are among the first group of authors invited over to the site. I hope that you will consider it. You can find Laefe at http://itsuwari.com/bookstore/. My name is Emilia Baptiste, you can call me Emi when we talk on msn @ waterempath@hotmail.com. All the information you will need will be on the website and anything that is not clear you can ask me.
All I ask is that you give Laefe a look and see if it might be where you would like to further progress in your quest to writing your ultimate story. Thank you for your time and I do hope to hear from you soon.
Emi Baptiste
Admin of Itsuwari.com and Laefe Epublishing.
I know that you will automatically think that this might be a scam so to help ease your worries you can either check out my own profile on this site so you can see that I am the real deal, or you can add me to Windows Live Messenger that you can ask me any questions that may come to your mind.
Laefe is a new online epublishing and you are among the first group of authors invited over to the site. I hope that you will consider it. You can find Laefe at http://itsuwari.com/bookstore/. My name is Emilia Baptiste, you can call me Emi when we talk on msn @ waterempath@hotmail.com. All the information you will need will be on the website and anything that is not clear you can ask me.
All I ask is that you give Laefe a look and see if it might be where you would like to further progress in your quest to writing your ultimate story. Thank you for your time and I do hope to hear from you soon.
Emi Baptiste
Admin of Itsuwari.com and Laefe Epublishing.
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December 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Just incredable.One of the best here, no doubt.
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November 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Holy Crap That Was CONFUSING O__O;;
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November 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Read it. Awesome.
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November 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Guahh, so good even if it is short. I liked how confused and jumbled Sasuke's thoughts were, his feelings torn because he isn't sure whom he is anymore oh but he sure knows how Naruto makes him feel. Love, hate, anger, regret, relief, all there for him in that whirlpool of emotion. And the grey girl can only die, and to be honest, that is okay because there is no place for her between them, that is very certain.
After I read the last chapter, I was wondering how you were going to integrate all the injuries that Naruto cleans as the original chapter of the Round Robin opens. This is really great because it ties it well. I can't wait for Naruto's side, as usual, he is the boy that I follow and feel the most for.
*huggles* You are the best, I love it when I find something from you.
After I read the last chapter, I was wondering how you were going to integrate all the injuries that Naruto cleans as the original chapter of the Round Robin opens. This is really great because it ties it well. I can't wait for Naruto's side, as usual, he is the boy that I follow and feel the most for.
*huggles* You are the best, I love it when I find something from you.
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November 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Rawr.. I love your writing. You are made of love and win. -gives you presants and huggles- <3 ^.~
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November 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
D8!!!! Brilliant~~! Sasuke's thoughts are mixed between hatred and love and obsession...It really shows how confused he really is after orochimaru was gone. *__* Lovely~~
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November 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Okay. So Sasuke's confused, his narrative reads like some psychedelic Beatles song and I'm really really confused too.
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Congratulations. ^^"
Oh, oh! But the random 'dead last idiot' thrown in cut just so, because...because... because I'm a sentimental old foppy and things.
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Congratulations. ^^"
Oh, oh! But the random 'dead last idiot' thrown in cut just so, because...because... because I'm a sentimental old foppy and things.
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November 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You know, I read this days ago, and just now got over my laziness to try and leave a coherent review... well, I'm trying at least.
In general, I love the identity crisis. =) I have those usually, but I like it in the story. maybe sasuke can be a kaleidoscope, too!!! Ah, and he presses it upon Naruto with the angel/devil dichotomy... and the continual mention of eyes. Very pretty... and heartbreaking. I can really feel Sasuke's frustration, especially as he loses to the dead last idiot... either that or I'm just anxious. =)
"just as the cloud is really only water" I think is my favorite line, especially in relation to the mistress of the smoke and fog. I wonder if it could be nice instead of saying "Smoke would claim me as hers" saying "The smoke would claim me as hers" I think your readers would still get the point, but I think it sets up a prettier metaphor. But whatever, your way is also nice.
Um the fighting and dancing, yeah. I like that, too. Rotting (gross but effective) I love the word sultry. And the marionette with no strings... Sasuke has never been more than a puppet. Except now one of the puppet masters has been killed (what of the other, I wonder... you have yet to mention anything of Itachi, right?) Ooo "blur in my mouth" that's nice. Way better than slur. Um... there's something I don't like with the line "lusciously found out" I don't think it's the preposition that bugs me this time... =) I'm just not sure about the phrase "found out" It's just kinda clumsy. dunno, you could leave it.
Um yeah, so this is probably the pooyest review ever, and not even remotely coherent. Sorry. Dunno what is wrong with my brain. I blame you, because this chapter makes me too anxious to think clearly. =)
Dood! I just caught the review above mine (I don't usually read the other reviews, it feels kinda like I'm spying or something) anyway, it totally does read like a trippy beatles song. All about newspaper taxies and look to the girl with the sun in her eyes... (and she's gone) you know, I think I've referenced Lucy twice now in my reviews of this story... but I love that song.
In general, I love the identity crisis. =) I have those usually, but I like it in the story. maybe sasuke can be a kaleidoscope, too!!! Ah, and he presses it upon Naruto with the angel/devil dichotomy... and the continual mention of eyes. Very pretty... and heartbreaking. I can really feel Sasuke's frustration, especially as he loses to the dead last idiot... either that or I'm just anxious. =)
"just as the cloud is really only water" I think is my favorite line, especially in relation to the mistress of the smoke and fog. I wonder if it could be nice instead of saying "Smoke would claim me as hers" saying "The smoke would claim me as hers" I think your readers would still get the point, but I think it sets up a prettier metaphor. But whatever, your way is also nice.
Um the fighting and dancing, yeah. I like that, too. Rotting (gross but effective) I love the word sultry. And the marionette with no strings... Sasuke has never been more than a puppet. Except now one of the puppet masters has been killed (what of the other, I wonder... you have yet to mention anything of Itachi, right?) Ooo "blur in my mouth" that's nice. Way better than slur. Um... there's something I don't like with the line "lusciously found out" I don't think it's the preposition that bugs me this time... =) I'm just not sure about the phrase "found out" It's just kinda clumsy. dunno, you could leave it.
Um yeah, so this is probably the pooyest review ever, and not even remotely coherent. Sorry. Dunno what is wrong with my brain. I blame you, because this chapter makes me too anxious to think clearly. =)
Dood! I just caught the review above mine (I don't usually read the other reviews, it feels kinda like I'm spying or something) anyway, it totally does read like a trippy beatles song. All about newspaper taxies and look to the girl with the sun in her eyes... (and she's gone) you know, I think I've referenced Lucy twice now in my reviews of this story... but I love that song.
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November 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
It is psychedelic; this reads like a mist, sort of wreathing and alluring and not quite tangible. It makes me feel as if the words are butterflies, dancing past when I try and reach out. Does that makes sense?
I like the way the bits of... verse? are woven in because there's both the effective enjambment and effect of poetry and the starker reality of prose.
You don't really say it, or at least you didn't in the chapter before this but it struck me how Naruto's become so strong. But at the same time he's older, jaded, and it's painful but it seems somehow necessary. (And then I feel that it should never be necessary to grow up.)
And Sasuke... Sasuke, disoriented, and he doesn't know, and he leaps into a fight with Naruto. And their fights are necessary, too, because they're practically defined by fighting and this situation - but there's an overwhelming feeling that this isn't something that ought to happen.
I wish I wasn't the kind that never wants fights to last long as well as being the kind who likes(?) reading angst and things because it's so awfully conflicting.
Um. I have rambled terribly, I see. In short, I love the way you write, and the UST chapter is gorgeous, really. I'll have to agree, the dead last idiot bit is so... painful, actually. Impactful.
I like the way the bits of... verse? are woven in because there's both the effective enjambment and effect of poetry and the starker reality of prose.
You don't really say it, or at least you didn't in the chapter before this but it struck me how Naruto's become so strong. But at the same time he's older, jaded, and it's painful but it seems somehow necessary. (And then I feel that it should never be necessary to grow up.)
And Sasuke... Sasuke, disoriented, and he doesn't know, and he leaps into a fight with Naruto. And their fights are necessary, too, because they're practically defined by fighting and this situation - but there's an overwhelming feeling that this isn't something that ought to happen.
I wish I wasn't the kind that never wants fights to last long as well as being the kind who likes(?) reading angst and things because it's so awfully conflicting.
Um. I have rambled terribly, I see. In short, I love the way you write, and the UST chapter is gorgeous, really. I'll have to agree, the dead last idiot bit is so... painful, actually. Impactful.