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November 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hi, this is Seto's Darkness, who is yet to join this lovely community once she has got the time to make a livejournal account :P
I love the way you write, even though it's a bit different from your previous stories :P I'm happy that even though you attempted at a change in your writing style, you still manage to relate the characters -in this case, Sasuke- to the readers. The formatting is also very great, and aids in creating the "mood" for this story. Though I have to admit that I was a bit confused during the first time I read it =D But I think that it's just me XD
Woaaaaah ^___^ Very exquisite story :) Naaaah. I wonder what would Naruto do... Can't wait for the next chapter! :)
Keep up the good work ^____^ I hope this feedback cheers you up/gives you back the energy taken away by writing this incredible piece of a fanfic! ^__^
>> Seto's Darkness
I love the way you write, even though it's a bit different from your previous stories :P I'm happy that even though you attempted at a change in your writing style, you still manage to relate the characters -in this case, Sasuke- to the readers. The formatting is also very great, and aids in creating the "mood" for this story. Though I have to admit that I was a bit confused during the first time I read it =D But I think that it's just me XD
Woaaaaah ^___^ Very exquisite story :) Naaaah. I wonder what would Naruto do... Can't wait for the next chapter! :)
Keep up the good work ^____^ I hope this feedback cheers you up/gives you back the energy taken away by writing this incredible piece of a fanfic! ^__^
>> Seto's Darkness
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November 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
...I feel too insignifigant and stupid to say anything. But wow.
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November 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
D:...*stunned* I...love how you write it. (and is it me or is the style alittle different from your usual?)
Everything has this...dreamy feel...like Sasuke's there, but not, and he thinks he's dreaming, but he's not...
Lovely. I wanna read Naruto's too~! :D!!
Everything has this...dreamy feel...like Sasuke's there, but not, and he thinks he's dreaming, but he's not...
Lovely. I wanna read Naruto's too~! :D!!
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November 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
;____________;
Sasuke. *heartbreaks*
The writing style is slightly different..I think it's something about your sentences? It's more abrupt, and so nicely impactful. Not too jerky, but could do with some more polishing? The poetry and prose mix is not as beautiful or elegant...um, ARGH I DON'T KNOW IT JUST FEELS DIFFERENT OMG.
Mrrrrrr~ The little snippet of Naruto made me squee and then tumble back into Teh Valley Of Despair And Angst™ in the next few sentences.
:DDD
After the operation everything is really smooth and absolutely Oto-nin-y. Er. If you get what I mean. But you do a fantabulously creepy Orochimaru that just fits and melds perfectly and...that's quite scary actually. *backs away from Taes* XDD
But Sasuke's sudden regret, much too late, and his despair is done beautifully and...oh, Sasuke. ;___________; NARUTO COME AND SAVE SASUKE OMG.
Sasuke. *heartbreaks*
The writing style is slightly different..I think it's something about your sentences? It's more abrupt, and so nicely impactful. Not too jerky, but could do with some more polishing? The poetry and prose mix is not as beautiful or elegant...um, ARGH I DON'T KNOW IT JUST FEELS DIFFERENT OMG.
Mrrrrrr~ The little snippet of Naruto made me squee and then tumble back into Teh Valley Of Despair And Angst™ in the next few sentences.
:DDD
After the operation everything is really smooth and absolutely Oto-nin-y. Er. If you get what I mean. But you do a fantabulously creepy Orochimaru that just fits and melds perfectly and...that's quite scary actually. *backs away from Taes* XDD
But Sasuke's sudden regret, much too late, and his despair is done beautifully and...oh, Sasuke. ;___________; NARUTO COME AND SAVE SASUKE OMG.