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for Trouble in Paradise

by terranigma11

person Anon
schedule November 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OMG! Waht is chicken head gonna do to my Naru-chan?! Is he gonna kill him?! Please update i wanna find out!
person Nomme de Plume
schedule November 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i seriously cracked up during that gaara and the made up language scene! oh please, oh please update! i want to know what evil plan sasuke has in store for naruto! and i still want to know about the hamlet quote. that's where the angst comes from, right, right? anyway, please keep going!
person Tara
schedule November 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
*Sighs of relief*
So you WILL be continuing "Our Most Featured Naruto" in the future...NEAR future, I hope? *visibly relaxes* Ok, I guess I can calm down now. Freaked out for a day there...lol

Anywayz, I'm still amazed at the wonder that is your writing skills! You have me laughing everytime I read your stories-no joke! My cousin actually yelled at me from downstairs that I sounded like a choking crow! (it's just the way I laugh...I tend not to breathe so I guess I really do choke!)
I'm totally loving the plot and how the story is unfolding! You put everything together so beautifully it hurts! *teary-eyed* I can never be as good a writer as you are...*sniffs*
Oh gosh, here I go getting all emotional again. *waves hand dismissally* Don't mind me, it's just the kool-aid.

But seriously-cannot wait to read the next chapter so lock-'n'-load 'em gurlie!

ps: Hoping to see some NejiNaru action, eh-eh? *bounces eyebrows up and down inquiringly*
pps: Wanna find out what Sasuke-Teme has thought of!
ppps: Gaara, the over-protective "older brother" awww...*coo's* that's so shweeeet! *pinches Gaara's cheek*

Gaara: *monotone deep voice with the unblinking eyes* "This is just a fictional-I am not like that. Touch me again and I'll have you screaming so loud the heavens and hell will be forced to cut off their ears!"

Tara: *turns to chibi-Tara, stares at Gaara stunned then runs with shaky legs to hide behind the safety of fence to cry*

*still sniffing teary-eyed*
Hurry and update soon!!
person Passing Reader
schedule November 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love the plot line to this, it just something fresh and origional ;p
I really think you caught all the characters persanalities really well, Gaara made me laugh histaricly,who would have thought lol ^^' Like I was saying, love your story and cant wait for the next chapter! ;p
person Adrienne
schedule November 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I absolutely love this story. I usually don't like NaruxSasu pairings unless the writer is really good. =]
So I hope to read more of your story soon.
person WoW
schedule November 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was awsome! Never read anything like it! That was very good start and i hope you update SOON!!
person urma lane
schedule November 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'm really hoping dat Gaara is Neji's assistant! PLEEZ PLEEZ PLEEEZ do that! Anyway love it! Naruto is still adorable even when beig molested hehehe
person Anon
schedule November 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is brilliant! I actually like Sakura in this cant wait for more
person Tara
schedule November 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
NANIIII?!?!
*face turns red with rage*
Are you saying that you've STOPPED writing "Our Most Featured Naruto"?!?!
W-w-why? ...This c-can't be!! *starts tearing up and drops to the floor hugging knees and rocking back and forth*
My...my favoritest-test story of all times...and you're...quitting it?! *snaps head back up and slams fists into the wall leaving a crack behind and a sore hand*
YOU CAN'T!! you can't do this to your readers!! What...what...*lost for words* ARRRGH!! *screams from frustration then breaks down crying hysterically...snot and all*
I refuse to let this happen! I'll start a protest even if I have to! You WILL continue that story! (It's one of the few reasons why I visit this site!! you can't take it away from me!)
*turns on heels furiously to walk out but walks back in again and smiles sweetly (mood totally changed)*

Peng story by the way! Is there a chance of Naru/Gaa? If not then at least satisfy me with a lil' "playing-hard-to-get" on Naruto's part! The fact that he allowed himself to be molested by Sasuke must be purely devastating and DEGRADING! Can he get back at him? Please! Let him tease him a little without realising it then shun Sasuke when he's at the brink of breaking point!! Make him feel guilty for molesting my poor beloved Naruto in the form of blue-balls every night he goes to sleep and every morning he wakes up because he can't have him!!
Make him (Naruto) have a strong self-will...or is it will-power. Whichever...but he likes Sakura...or at least he thinks she's smexy. So that means he's straight right? (for the time being?).

ps: Anyhope of Naru/Neji though? *looks hopeful*

pss (or is it "pps"?): Hopefully this is a full blown out story and not just shots.

psss (ppps): Remember..."hard-to-get" lol.

pssss (pppps): What's the whole thing about "trouble in Hamlet"? Shed more light on that in the next chapter if possible, will you?
person aria
schedule November 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
another great story!
poor Naruto...what happens next?
can't wait for the next. please update soon~