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for Trouble in Paradise

by terranigma11

person Shosuro
schedule November 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Sweet Jesus that was HOT!!
I like it so far!!
Can't wait until you update, next time.
person kaesaku
schedule November 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wai~
i like!
so interesting..
'hope you update soon!
can't wait~
^^
person dut
schedule November 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow.. thats a nice start.. wohoo~ hot...more more! Hope Naruot wont give in so easily
person Nomme de Plume
schedule November 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
my god. this story is so addicting. i must have more! and i love the shakespeare thing you did with whom i'm assuming is itachi, but it might not be... anyway, i look forward to your next update!
person kiss_me_deadly
schedule November 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Gossiping Sasuke was just too precious for words. I liked the interaction between Sasuke and Sakura, very believeable.

The only suggestion I have is a little more attention to editing. You had some strange typos in there. No biggie, though.
person SharinganEyes
schedule November 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
why do i have a bad feeling about that note -shivers- oh creepy! hehe poor naruto got molested by sasuke hehe, and does Gaara for no Neji? Wait, why was Naruto not wanting to work with Neji...wait the letter right? Okay Okay I gottcha! Sorry to hear about ur other story I liked it. Though...I like this one a bit more ^_^ Update when u can!

Ja!
person Sama
schedule November 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OMG!!! Totally awesome girly!!! I can't wait for you to update again! Hopefully soon! Please let it be soon? LOL. See ya!!!
person Lanie
schedule November 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow, I think that was a fantastic start, and a really good plotline (I probably sound perverted for saying that, but seriously it is!). I can't wait to read more so update soon please.