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*Cough* I meant love...

That is soooo cute!!!! Hurry up with the next chapter!

“ForgetitIreallyshouldbegoingthanksforthetea!”

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hiya!!!! -fangirlish scream of orgasmic joy- i have been waiting for this to come for some time now (used to be just lilithwolf)! i absolutly love reading your fanfics and we definetly need more narugaa on this site! -sighs- i love your portrayel of both naruto and gaara... so beautiful! i dont know what kankuro's problem is, but maybe he's becoming a protective older brother? grr. anyway, glad your back and hope to see more soon!

Sweet! You updated! Writer's block sucks, i know. Half the time i suffer from it and thats why i help others with their stories because i'll start something sometimes and not finish and that aint good. In fact i havent posted anything on here for fear that i'll leave it. Anyway this chappie was good. Such a teaser too, you bad person! Naruto and Gaara just get cuter and cuter. But i imagine it wouldn't be easy for Gaara all the time so Naruto being there for him really is sweet. Kankouro's reaction to this whole thing is hilarious btw. Good job.

That was so cute! I think deep don Gaara has always wanted someone to love or understand him. Anyway, great chappie. Me likey. Update soon.

Well not many people place me as a flamboyantly gay boy, but I am ^^;

*cough* Anyway, I really can't wait until the next chaptre. I'm really loving this story.

YAY! An update! Im so glad, your story is so freakin cute. Can't wait for the next one! ^_^

Hrm, I really like the pairing, but judging by your writing I'd say you're either very young, not a native English speaker, or really inexperienced. I suggest finding a beta writer to help you clean up all the type-os and simple English mistakes. As for the story, I appreciate the story at moments, but the shifts between points of view feel choppy. Like someone yells "cut" does a quick change in scenes and then tries to resume the action. It interrupts the flow of the story. Point of view is pretty difficult, but experiment. Maybe figure out what type of pov you want and try to be constant. Also, as an author, you sometimes interrupt your own story with comments. I know some writers do it to be humorous, but in your case, I think they're more disruptive. Try to stick with just the story. By inserting comments, you're telling the reader what to think based on the details provided, rather than letting the story tell itself. I was a little irritated by the quote "Yes I said skipping, just lie a real gay boy!!" because I have gay friends, and not all of them are flaming or feminine. I'd say skipping matches Naruto's character because he's happy go lucky, and not because he's "gay" as you put it. Unless you were trying to say that he's gay as in "happy." Either way, comments like that are unncessary and you're not letting your story speak for itself.

Good luck in your writing. I look forward to future chapters :)