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June 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well.... that was interesting:) I have to say I was somewhat expecting them to find out about Takashi given Naruto's exertion of himself. It didn't seem like be able to hold on to Takashi's disguise, like he couldn't hold on to his own. But I guess if that was the case, Takashi helped out by not opening his eyes. No give away there. He's just the ideal baby isn't he:)
During that last conversation, it took me awhile to figure out what they were so upset about. But maybe that was because it was being told from Neji's pov and he doesn't know what's going on. But that made me feel a bit slow:) But anyways, it would have been interesting to see her reaction if she examined Takashi. Things are going really well for them in this secret keeping thing. I'm just waiting for something to go wrong, and for them to be found out. Though hopefully it would be by someone who wouldn't cause any issues for them.
It would be cool to see what Neji mentioned happen. A select few knowing and it becoming a little internal conspiracy. Though I find I wonder what will happen if/when Sasuke comes back to the village. You never went into any real detail about what happened when he was there but I imagine he knows that Naruto was pregnant. So he'd know that Takashi is Neji's son too, born of a male. I guess out -of-sight, out-of-mind but if I was them, or maybe just Neji since we don't know what happened with him and Naruto, I'd be a bit worried that someone out there who knows who they are knows the circumstances that they're trying to hide and has unknown motives. That's a long sentence, I hope it made sense. Anyways loved the chapter as always and I can't for the next to see how they settle into this life they've chosen to try to protect Takashi from his lineage and to also see if maybe they'll decide to tell anyone.
During that last conversation, it took me awhile to figure out what they were so upset about. But maybe that was because it was being told from Neji's pov and he doesn't know what's going on. But that made me feel a bit slow:) But anyways, it would have been interesting to see her reaction if she examined Takashi. Things are going really well for them in this secret keeping thing. I'm just waiting for something to go wrong, and for them to be found out. Though hopefully it would be by someone who wouldn't cause any issues for them.
It would be cool to see what Neji mentioned happen. A select few knowing and it becoming a little internal conspiracy. Though I find I wonder what will happen if/when Sasuke comes back to the village. You never went into any real detail about what happened when he was there but I imagine he knows that Naruto was pregnant. So he'd know that Takashi is Neji's son too, born of a male. I guess out -of-sight, out-of-mind but if I was them, or maybe just Neji since we don't know what happened with him and Naruto, I'd be a bit worried that someone out there who knows who they are knows the circumstances that they're trying to hide and has unknown motives. That's a long sentence, I hope it made sense. Anyways loved the chapter as always and I can't for the next to see how they settle into this life they've chosen to try to protect Takashi from his lineage and to also see if maybe they'll decide to tell anyone.
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June 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Great story, I love it. I can't wait to see how thier lives end up.
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June 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
wow this is an interesting story I would like to read more of it, Due continue!
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June 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
WOW
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June 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
WOW (plain and simple) Awesome chapter, I can't wait for more!
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June 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Cool! Takashi is going to be a strong kid!
Can't wait to find out what happens next!
Can't wait to find out what happens next!
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May 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh crap! They're under attack! Nooo I don't want anyone to die!
Hmm...But I wonder who's attacking them? Don't let their baby be kidnapped! I'd die! Sweet Takashi-chan. This has DRAMA written all over it. ^_^ Oh I'm so excited! Next chapter in June neh? Hmmm I'll be rrrriiiight here ^__^.
Hmm...But I wonder who's attacking them? Don't let their baby be kidnapped! I'd die! Sweet Takashi-chan. This has DRAMA written all over it. ^_^ Oh I'm so excited! Next chapter in June neh? Hmmm I'll be rrrriiiight here ^__^.
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May 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Cool, though when the kid gets older, what sort of power will he have? The eyes are a dead giveaway if it falters, and who's going to keep him? Can't wait for more, this is really wonderful.
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May 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
evil cliffie..... but such a wonderful update. they are so perfect together and takashi is too cute. i eagerly look foward to your next update.
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May 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ZOMG!! What the hell happened!! Crap, I can't believe they have to go back to the village...it saddens me greatly that they have to go back to that hell hole. I really didn't want them to leave the village. I just hope that they're okay, seeing as they're under attack. How embarrassing .///. Your suppose to be one of the most powerful shinobi in the Fire Country...and you then you ge tattacked... .//. how embarrassing.
-Damp *That is very embarrassing*
-Damp *That is very embarrassing*