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for Kitsune no Yomeiri

by BishounenKrazed

person rala
schedule December 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I heard that the texan term for sunshower is "The Devil is beating his wife."
I think I like the "fox's wedding" better.
person ladygizarme
schedule December 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ack! such a tease, i can't wait for the next chapter! he doesn't think anything of naruto's name for him, but he WILL? wheeeeeen?? ack, i'm impatient, but i loved the scene by naruto's swing, even if sasuke was ooc, so fuckin what :p ahhh naruto, i hope you start doing somethin "right" soon!
person Anna
schedule December 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Yay! this is only getting better and better!
please more!
person littleolmee
schedule December 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
LOL, don't you just hate it when you loss your muse for a story and have another pulling for attention? This has a great start. It's interesting you've made Naruto the demon lord taken away and now coming back for Sasuke. I like it . . . love the title . . . hmm, where have I heard that phrase? Oh yes, from my own story LOL! It works great by the way. Keep up the good work.
person Sunset Serenity
schedule December 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ha, you're expanding it! Thanks. The last two chapters were very interesting. Ch 4 Naruto really kicked ass(es). Ch. 5 Sasu Naru interactions were fun to read. Sasuke was a bit OC but you told us already. Can't wait for the next chapter.

- Sunset Serenity
person Exane
schedule December 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Such a great story XD! I like the way you would think that Naruto would only marry the 'usual' Sasuke!
I hope you'll update again XD!! This is such a cool story, it's hard to see where it's going since you've actually turned the story a lot XD!! I'm looking forward to see what Naruto would actually do before Sasuke starts screwing him senseless XDDDD!
person Mirror-chan
schedule December 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
By reading the summary I wasn't sure if I'd want to read this story... but I'm glad I did, anyway. I like the way you've managed to take away strangeness that usually comes with slightly AU fictions and make the change from the actual plot of Naruto seem logical. Also, I adore Jiraiya and I'm glad he makes an appearance in your story. I can't wait to read more. Excellant fic.
person ladygizarme
schedule December 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
yay, totally loving this story! i'm glad it's going to be a bit longer than you said at the beginning cuz there's so much potential for the future of the story! nevertheless, i like that it's a really detailed story but the pace isn't dragging because of it; and yeah naru totally kicked ass in ch4, that was awesome! i can't wait for the next chapter and to see sasuke's reaction!
person Sunset Serenity
schedule December 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey, that was really good. It would be nice if you throw a twist here and there to make it longer, such as Akatsuki attacking or the like. Well, good job!
person lalalala
schedule December 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I kinda feel bad for Sakura. I mean, she's just a normal hormonal teenage girl with way too much energy.
Young girls have a tendency to declare their true love is one thing or person and pursue that one thing whether it is harmful to them or not. Eventually they either grow up and realize that it was the pursuing that they like and not the person, or they grow up and become psycho moms who need pills to make it through the day.