rate_review Reviews

Dude you should put it to book form LOL and get it published, perhaps even make a hentai out of it. NICE work man!

The story was enjoyable... but I do have a few problems with it. First, although the story is sufficiently long, it is still incomplete. The part where Konan, the female Akatsuki member, talks to Naruto (and all subsequent scenes) is cut off and then skips to the ending orgy. Second, again it is long but unnecessarily so... reiterating Fyberness' review, there are some details that you can do without... I know you worked hard on this and it would be a pity if it was never truly finished. I look forward to you finishing your masterpiece... Good luck!

tis a pure goldmine of smut... I LOVE IT!!!! Wow, its was long but worth the the read, this is puts a lot of other storyies to shame, this is a masterpiece... wow thats all I can say... wow...

All I can really say is...WOW! This is one of the biggest and vest of your stories so far. I look forward to seeing more work like this in the future.

Alright, first things first.

I commend and respect you on writing a story that involves Naruto and the more interesting part of the female cast. However, I have a few gripes and they really stop me from enjoying what you write.

Mainly... You really need to stop explaining everthing with what they feel. He felt this because... The feeling was like... The feelings he was getting were... This happened because of what he felt and that caused...

And so on, and so on. You keep repeating it so much, and it seems you want to explain so much on what happens and what sensations you'd like characters to undergo, that you let it interfere with a solid flowing story.

It's truly a pity.

I do think that this is your masterpiece, but I don't believe that your best work is behind you so keep at it and great job

This must have taken you a good while to finsh this up. After i read it i was like damn. For some goddamn fucking reason i can't read the fucker and it's pissing me off. I getting ready to say fuck it and take it off my favorites if it keeps doing ths goddamn bullshit.

You are the king of hentai There were a few grammar errors nothing big though I would like to thank you for this amazing piece of work I hope you make a sequel

Oh my god man how long did it take you to write this?
It's really good.

I love this story, but i have to say that the comment "(I’d like to have her as a girlfriend… a girl who doesn’t mind someone watching porn… that is the stuff that dreams are made off… or more likely, that girls are not made off… just put on a porn tape and they’ll instantly label you as some sick pervert… makes you wonder what they will say the moment you put in La Blue Girl and they see the tentacles… then it would be like OMFG! YOU HYPER PERVERT! I’d laugh my ass off though…)" is mostly inacurate. My pet Angel, her sister Michelle, her best friend Anna, and all 16 of my sisters have actually sat down and watched porn tapes WITH me after they'd walked in. In my sister's cases while saying "What the hell?! You didn't invite us?!". While they're not sluts, i'll admit my sisters are nymphos, and my fiancee willingly lives as my personal sex pet. So, while i find that comment funny in an anime universe sorta situation, i don't think it's accurate... or you only know a bunch of prudes who've never gotten anything GOOD in bed. :-P Keep up the awesome fic work!