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by ClaireBear

person Sean
schedule January 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OH SHIT! I could not have seen that coming. God that scene where they say 'good bye' i was choked up. ok anyway nice job keep it up
~Dim Song
schedule January 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
AWwwWW!! Poor Hinata! but at the same time, I know Kurenai is going to help, maybe with her help Hinata get out of the bad situation! Neji is going to be sad but er sister is safe, so that's a point in favor. I like how Kurenai wanting to help came to them and now I think Hinata knows that Naruto really cares about her! will Naruto say the magic 3 words to her? or will be Hinata the one saying them first? (even thinking we DO know they love each other, witch is THE cuteness)

Nice chapter, see you later!
schedule January 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Another wonderful chapter. I see that things have begun to happen in the plot again, a little break from the lemon. Though I feel kind of bad for Naruto, so close yet so far. It interesting to watch how everything ties in together. Without the lemon this sis still and enjoyable and intense story. I'm not dismissing the lemons though, I'm sayign you write both really well and that thios manages to keep the rhythm of a of movement, the plot is working toward soemthign even while the characters are seemingly just growing internally.
Good job.
person Twiggies
schedule January 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You really have to update soon again. Well, in this chapter there wasn't very much action, but I understand that not every chapter have lemons in them. xDD
Heheh. But this was interesting too. Update soon!
schedule January 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hmm don't feel you have to rush huny, you shoudl enjoy yourself. i foudn the comedy was very good. It wasn't that short either, only short in comparison to your other chapters. I'm enjoyign this story as always, I want you to enjoy it too.
Angst
schedule January 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This chapter was fun. Everybody is victim of Neji's wrath, jajaja, Anyway, I wonder what the next is going to be about, I love your story! is so entretaning.
schedule January 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh man that was hot!
Naruto's Episode ^_^ was really steamy. Gosh Hinata's so shy
it's unbearable! lol
Great job! I give it two thumbs up!
person Twiggies
schedule January 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Heheheh. This was good!
I love the whole chapter. Please write more soon.
Can't wait to see how big Narutos pruises are. xDD -giggle-
schedule January 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Run for your life Naruto! eji is okay with you being with Hinata but not with you showing the habits you pick from Jiraiya! Run and hide!! LOL

Wax? OMG! WHY? THE PAIN! *faints*...*comes back* Okay, I'm done, sorry, is just...after using wax.. you know, its very.. well...unpleasent to even walk, dear God... *fainst again* ...*comes back* Anyway, Sasuke so loves Neji, all to himself, I wouldn't se suprised if he is all possesive over Him, good! jajaja that's so cute, jjaja. This chapter was funny, interesting and cute, jeje. See you next time!
person Sean
schedule January 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ahhhhh... 1 for neji understanding and 2 for not murding naruto lol. But the whole "Blue movie thing was priceless i shit bricks. I bad for hinata now wonder what shes thinking...
~Dim Song
P.s damn that was alot of words to write PSP