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by ClaireBear

person Dim Song
schedule January 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Nice, way to go u got the culture stuff nicely cant wait for lemon
~Dim Song
person Soft_touches
schedule January 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Naruto needs to grow some balls. I can't wait for him to say those three little words to Hinata. Can you make her first time very special... Plleeaassee. Oh yeah is Neji ever going to be in a dress? Thanks for answering my questions, I know I ask alot sometimes but I LUV your story. Did you know the strongest muscle in the human body is the tongue! Lol
person Angst
schedule January 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yay, I love Itachi he's such fun to read. hey hun, are you still enjoyign writign this? Fanfiction shouldn't be a burden you should want to write this. Do what you instinctively feel is write, it may not please all your reviewers but you are your most important judge and critic if you like it it will be good.
As for suggestions: Cross dressing? Disguise Hinata as a guy ( kind of ripping off of Neji, I know but still interesting. Though I could see why nejo might object. He may feel like it's making fun of his situation.)

Perhaps some other form of disguise or the help of a teacher who accidently coems across the Hyuuga. Perhaps not knowing the situation but having a friendl;y conversation ( ie. Neji and Sasuke both threaten to beat the crap out of them and or financially ruin them for life. Or perhaps bribery using upcoming snippets from the makeout paradise series. ^^;Perhaps they try to disguise her as a foreign exchange student. It maybe better for Hinata to leave Japan and the influence of the Hyuuga and Orichimaru. Thereby they enroll her in one semester by hacking into the schools systems. Okay, I know most of my ideas are pretty far out there, trust your gut.
luvs,
Angst
schedule January 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Don't worry, the girls you describe are not normal, are bitchy-annoying-deadly-obssesed-cherry-girls, witch is diferent, I am a girl and I have seen persons like that and dislike them A LOT, it's just so annoying...I can't stand it.
person silent pluto
schedule January 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow, this story is so well put together, seriously.
I'm a big naruto/hinata fan ^_^, and this fic
is full of warm fuzzy feelings! yay lol
Keep up the good work! Update soon, I wanna see
if Naruto will ever spill his guts to Hinata, figuratively
or literally. Whichever! lol
schedule January 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hinata is so damn cute! I can barely stand it, GOD!! *glomps Hinata*
schedule January 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Awwww, that was cute. Come on Naruto! say it! Hinata-chans loves you too! do ityou little blonde!! (and btw, Sasuke and Neji's relationshio is adorable and HOT, yay!)
person Dim Song
schedule January 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Awww damn, chp made me a little sad poor naruto owell hope it gets better
~Dim Song
person Angst
schedule January 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Aww, that chapter was sweet. I like how you were able to portray Naruto's uncertainty and self-deerision. I wonder whot hat mystery girl was, the one who broke his heart. Probably no one important right? Thank you for updating so quickly.
person Pam
schedule January 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
AAWW ! YES !
I love this story! I really LOVE it!
And I love SasuNeji, and that Neji is actually a girl makes this even more interesting story!
Please update soon again!
Oh and does Hinata know about Neji.. I mean that 'he' is a girl?
Sooooo frigging goood story!!
I hope that Neji and Sasuke wouldn't shout to each other so much, tought.. Heh
UPDATE SOON !