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May 23, 2015 at 12:00 AM
So cute!! I love seeing their interactions. Thanks for writing!
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November 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Nice. Do more!
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April 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
First chapter: Not too bad.. definitely not bad, nor great. It was average, perhaps slightly above.
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April 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I was only giving you a hard time. Both chapters are really well done, you did a very very nice job.
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October 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey! That was such a nice story! I still have to read the second chapter, but I've loved it so far. Averyone has probably told you this already, but you're great at writing, you know?
I really hope you continue to write more chapters to this story, or more fics, for that matter. Thanks for sharing your writing with the world!
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October 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh, I forgot to include this on my review!
Maybe it's the fact that Ten-Ten is my favorite character, or that the series doesn't focus enough on her, which opens up a great variety of fanfiction possibilities, but, opposite to what everyone else says, I think Ten-Ten and Gaara make a nice couple (not as nice as Ten-Ten and Neji, but nice enough), and as I read the story, I pictured Ten-Ten "acting" it all the time.
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September 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i really like this fic. ^_^ not too many of SakuGaa it seems. looking forward to next one!
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August 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Jesus, I can't believe I actually went through the trouble of creating an account just so I could review this story. I guess it's the very least I could do since it's the best I've ever read, and you'll just have to trust me when I say I've read quite a few, and trust me even more when I say I'm picky. Well, I'm aware mostly everyone says that, but I really am horribly, terribly, annoyingly picky. But your story really made quite the impression on me. I had to read it a few times to make sure that I wasn't hallucinating, no, the writing really is that good, the characters really are that endearing. Needless to say you're quite talented, so I won't dwell on the topic. And even though there are only two chapters (now is the time where I do a little begging. Please, oh please, write more chapters!) it's clear there are a lot more issues to tap into. You've made the characters' humanity shine through in a way that there was a feeling of possibility left lingering. I can't pinpoint one aspect that makes this story amazing in my eyes. Maybe it's the dialogs, maybe it's the sensitivity with which feelings are dealt, maybe it's the fact that "Wild is the Wind" is a beautiful, beautiful song. Maybe it's the fact that I sighed after I was done, a little with content, a little out of disappointment because I guess we all wish for an emotionally charged relationship. Not that my current living arrangement with the boy currently sprawled on my bed isn't lovely (he is, even if he makes fun of me for reading stories which he labels "habits for 14 year-old girls to indulge in after they've done their homework." which makes me feel very old at 21). But sometimes a cushy European lifestyle complete with a 9 to 5's, bills to pay and etc just doesn't seem to cut it. And you can't help but feel stupid for wishing to be saved, or being a savior, or something to that extent. I guess I'm just not making any sense with all of this rambling, I really apologize for it. I never intended to make this so long, or confusing for that matter. The story just had that effect on me, I believe. In any case, if the project doesn't go ahead (hopefully it's not the case) you should be really proud for writing such a beautiful piece. I never know how to end reviews, so I'll just end with a smiley face, hope that does it. =)
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February 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey there.....again, I plague you. This review will be a little long, so bear with me. I feel I gotta let you know some stuff since you're so interested.
I absolutely appreciate your review. I don't get many of them, and it makes me wonder if people actually take the time to read it at all....but, perhaps no news is good news, right? I'm glad that you think it's alright for me to want to describe stuff. My imagination is rather large, and there are things that happen in the story that you would have never known that happened if I didn't describe it in detail, like when the mean little boy 'looked up, and his eyes flashed' before he left Sakura alone. It was because he saw Shino, and they generally were afraid of/disgusted with him, so it made him move in haste.
I love the first chapter with the scenery...I wish people could see what I do in my head....I'm an artist, but I don't think there is enough talent in me to draw and recreate what is so plain and clear in my head. I literally did a little bit of research on trees for that bit, because I didn't know the names of the trees (most of the ones listed are my favorites, especially aromatic sumac, red oak and japanese maple). Maybe I should give you a little taste of what the third chapter will be like...a summary of sorts, since I still haven't recieved the call, and it's practically been a week. (of agony, i assure you...)
There is a brief time skip to the day that Shino returns, where they are all thirteen (The official handbook says that Sakura and the rest of the rookies are in fact thirteen, not twelve when they become genin, except for Gaara, who WAS twelve, Kankuro was either 13 or 14, and Temari was 15) Shino walks past Sakura and Ino as they fought. Neither Sakura nor Shino really remember, but the feelings that they shared remained, and it confused the two of them. Then the whole kiss with sasuke and naruto is incorporated (I try to stick to the main storyline a bit) and the time skips again, for nothing really important happened between them unitl the initial time skip in the story.
Sakura is angry with Tsunade for shirking her duties when she sees that Tsunade looked dead serious. Sakura was then told about Suika, her aunt, who left a pink scroll with a pink ruby cord. The letter explains a lot of things to Sakura. That was as far as I got, but I have what else happened in my head. That's a little of the summary, so I hope it gives you a bit of an idea of what the next chapter is.
Another thing is that I have theme songs for both of them. if you get the chance to look them up, i hope you do. The songs just sort of fit with them, and it'd be a crime if I didn't properly administer them. Shino's song to Sakura is called 'Rendezvous' by Craig David....who has an amazing voice, btw......and I like Sakura's song to Shino even more. It's called 'By Your Side' by Sade. If you get a chance also, go to youtube and watch the music video for that song. It's given me a lot of inspiration whenever I write or draw, and I think you might like it.
Okay, seriously. I need to shut the hell up now. But it's sort of exciting, this is my first Naru-fic. i think i need to email you instead....but this was the first thing i could think of. oo!oooohh! write some other stuff, if you chance it!
*~*Kiyasume*~*
I absolutely appreciate your review. I don't get many of them, and it makes me wonder if people actually take the time to read it at all....but, perhaps no news is good news, right? I'm glad that you think it's alright for me to want to describe stuff. My imagination is rather large, and there are things that happen in the story that you would have never known that happened if I didn't describe it in detail, like when the mean little boy 'looked up, and his eyes flashed' before he left Sakura alone. It was because he saw Shino, and they generally were afraid of/disgusted with him, so it made him move in haste.
I love the first chapter with the scenery...I wish people could see what I do in my head....I'm an artist, but I don't think there is enough talent in me to draw and recreate what is so plain and clear in my head. I literally did a little bit of research on trees for that bit, because I didn't know the names of the trees (most of the ones listed are my favorites, especially aromatic sumac, red oak and japanese maple). Maybe I should give you a little taste of what the third chapter will be like...a summary of sorts, since I still haven't recieved the call, and it's practically been a week. (of agony, i assure you...)
There is a brief time skip to the day that Shino returns, where they are all thirteen (The official handbook says that Sakura and the rest of the rookies are in fact thirteen, not twelve when they become genin, except for Gaara, who WAS twelve, Kankuro was either 13 or 14, and Temari was 15) Shino walks past Sakura and Ino as they fought. Neither Sakura nor Shino really remember, but the feelings that they shared remained, and it confused the two of them. Then the whole kiss with sasuke and naruto is incorporated (I try to stick to the main storyline a bit) and the time skips again, for nothing really important happened between them unitl the initial time skip in the story.
Sakura is angry with Tsunade for shirking her duties when she sees that Tsunade looked dead serious. Sakura was then told about Suika, her aunt, who left a pink scroll with a pink ruby cord. The letter explains a lot of things to Sakura. That was as far as I got, but I have what else happened in my head. That's a little of the summary, so I hope it gives you a bit of an idea of what the next chapter is.
Another thing is that I have theme songs for both of them. if you get the chance to look them up, i hope you do. The songs just sort of fit with them, and it'd be a crime if I didn't properly administer them. Shino's song to Sakura is called 'Rendezvous' by Craig David....who has an amazing voice, btw......and I like Sakura's song to Shino even more. It's called 'By Your Side' by Sade. If you get a chance also, go to youtube and watch the music video for that song. It's given me a lot of inspiration whenever I write or draw, and I think you might like it.
Okay, seriously. I need to shut the hell up now. But it's sort of exciting, this is my first Naru-fic. i think i need to email you instead....but this was the first thing i could think of. oo!oooohh! write some other stuff, if you chance it!
*~*Kiyasume*~*
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February 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Konban Wa!
Heh...I'm a japanese major in college right now....'Genkotsu no Sakura is quite right.....but if you wanted a little more edge to it, you could have used 'Kobushi no Sakura' which means the exact same thing, but 'kobushi' also means 'warrior' or 'samurai' just to give it a bit more kick.
Hmm. I wonder if Sabaku is really his last name....does Kankuro-kun and Temari-chan have a last name? I don't know. Whatever. But (as a side note) I do love his japanese actor's voice.....whenever he makes Gaara say 'Sabaku no Sousou' (Desert Funeral/Burial) I melt into a puddle of happy.
If you notice, Sakura already has a pun in her name. Her last name 'Haruno' could also be 'Haru no Sakura' which unsurprisingly means 'Sakura of the Spring'. Heh, I'm good....*touches herself, a hissing noise emitting from her lips* :)
I love your story. It makes me feel all fuzzy and warm inside. And that's damn good too, I live in Michigan, and it's ass-cold outside!!!lol
*~*Kiyasume*~*
Heh...I'm a japanese major in college right now....'Genkotsu no Sakura is quite right.....but if you wanted a little more edge to it, you could have used 'Kobushi no Sakura' which means the exact same thing, but 'kobushi' also means 'warrior' or 'samurai' just to give it a bit more kick.
Hmm. I wonder if Sabaku is really his last name....does Kankuro-kun and Temari-chan have a last name? I don't know. Whatever. But (as a side note) I do love his japanese actor's voice.....whenever he makes Gaara say 'Sabaku no Sousou' (Desert Funeral/Burial) I melt into a puddle of happy.
If you notice, Sakura already has a pun in her name. Her last name 'Haruno' could also be 'Haru no Sakura' which unsurprisingly means 'Sakura of the Spring'. Heh, I'm good....*touches herself, a hissing noise emitting from her lips* :)
I love your story. It makes me feel all fuzzy and warm inside. And that's damn good too, I live in Michigan, and it's ass-cold outside!!!lol
*~*Kiyasume*~*